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Daniel (thickblueline)
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About Myself: just a new writer looking for some feedback

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DateTitleCategoryHits
Jun 3, 2008Traffic JammedMiscellaneous Stories 140
May 24, 2008I'm the TerroristMiscellaneous Stories 175
May 10, 2008The Adventures of Phil, the Styrofoam Coffee CupHumor 164
May 3, 2008Hostile Addictions CH. 2. part oneMiscellaneous Stories 109
May 3, 2008Hostile Addictions CH. 1Miscellaneous Stories 88
Apr 12, 2008A Thick Blue LineMiscellaneous Stories 142
Apr 12, 2008Between Honor and DutyAdventure 124
Apr 12, 2008True Last WordsMiscellaneous Stories 164

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06/08/2008 23:05:14At last, the end is nearOff-Topic96
05/19/2008 21:49:54Re:Favorite AuthorOff-Topic2547

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Total number of comments: 12

Title article: Traffic Jammed
Date: 2008-06-03 19:23:46
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yea, this story is 100 percent true and was written while the events were occurring. I realized that it was kind of drawn out, but it wasn't like I had anything better to do ;-) Thanks for your comment

Title article: Dodmen Chapter Four
Date: 2008-05-21 16:03:49
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Thanks for reading DODMEN. I agree with your last comment about the main character needing more inner conflict. I have completed up to CHapter 12, although they are the first drafts only. In the next chapter he finally has enough of Coop and the whole ley line business and tells him to go F*** himself, although with consequences. I'm glad you enjoyed it and any further feedback for my next chapters will be appreciated. 
 
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Title article: Hero
Date: 2008-05-19 14:41:35
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I liked it. Powerful stuff, especially when you realize that this kind of stuff actually does happen

Title article: Pedestrian
Date: 2008-04-25 21:25:17
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nice story. I loved how you left the ending open and the way you built the suspense with the reaction of the cadillac driver. The one bit of advise I can offer is you may want to put an attention getter in the first few sentences. Something to really grab me and make me want to read the rest of the story.

Title article: Ouija
Date: 2008-04-23 01:38:33
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Good description of some things but others needed to be clarified a little bit.

Title article: Run Away
Date: 2008-04-22 21:30:31
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Very powerful story that conjures up strong feelings.

Title article: A Work of Fiction
Date: 2008-04-22 21:21:17
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The behaviors of the characters seemed very real and well put together. I would recomend that you give the characters names instead of "cousin" or "young boy." It adds a sense of familiarity to it.

Title article: A Stroll in the Park
Date: 2008-04-13 00:16:52
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Amusingly morbid. That is how I would describe it. I liked it.

Title article: The Gods of Virginity
Date: 2008-04-13 00:03:45
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Hilarious. 'Nuff said

Title article: The fuchsia dashiki
Date: 2008-04-12 22:53:58
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I enjoyed the story and I commend you on it. It had some good original thinking in it. I agree with the first comment that it was a bit confusing, especially at the beginning. I thought that perhaps she had been injured while attempting to catch the frisbee. Nice writing though.

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