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I Will Lay In Vain

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About Myself: Life is my institute, Time my teacher, and Madness my friend. Rest, I am all alone.
I will become a great writer one day. Only the time is what I can't foretell.

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Published Short Stories

 
DateTitleCategoryHits
Sep 11, 2008The Deafening SilenceMiscellaneous Stories 121
Jul 10, 2008Sane and InsaneMiscellaneous Stories 129
Jul 10, 2008Sand CastleMiscellaneous Stories 132
Apr 26, 2008Dilemma DayMiscellaneous Stories 157
Apr 17, 2008In The Rain -- My first attempt at poetryPoetry 231
Apr 17, 2008It Hurts To Love a PersonMiscellaneous Stories 185
Apr 15, 2008The Perfect GodMiscellaneous Stories 168
Apr 8, 2008Three Seeds - Part 2Miscellaneous Stories 127
Apr 8, 2008Three Seeds - Part 1Miscellaneous Stories 129
Mar 30, 2008A Man's Last DreamMiscellaneous Stories 179
Mar 4, 2008A Clown's LifeMiscellaneous Stories 427
Feb 9, 2008HamiesMiscellaneous Stories 306
Feb 9, 2008Unfaithful LifeMystery 498
Nov 11, 2007The Honest ConfessionMiscellaneous Stories 510

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Total number of comments: 25

Title article: Rendition Of A Rose
Date: 2008-09-11 06:52:22
Excellent
Lovely. You play with words utterly well. The design is marvellous; it adds a lot to the poem.  
It reminded me of a rose plant I had in my backyard some ten years back. It was spoiled by my cat, who - for godforsaken reasons - saw a mouse climbing on it. Since then, I hate cats, and love rose poems.

Title article: Don't put me in the same box
Date: 2008-07-11 02:47:42

Excellet. It could do with a bit more rhyming.  
I don't believe in any religion. I dont understand how can a person have blind faith in someone whom they hve never seen; whose existance to them is confirmed only by their elders; and to their elders, it was confirmed by their elders.

Title article: Sand Castle
Date: 2008-07-11 02:36:41

Your comments have been encouraging. I agree it's lengthy, but it still follows the format of a short-story (3000-17500 words) 
I hope you like my furute works also, which are also long, but under 10k words.

Title article: We Don't Know Why
Date: 2008-07-10 11:01:20

Neither pathetic, nor remarkable.  
Some said the rhyming is forced - I felt just the opposite. Rhyming is pretty good.  
I agree it's a very simple, but not in the least childish or naive. 
 
Would like to read more woks by you. 
Criticism of life is an incomprehensible theme, but criticism of a particular incident in life is comprehensible.  
Comprehensible themes make deeper stories.

Title article: gone was the girl
Date: 2008-07-10 03:46:59

Fine. 
Short and sweet. 
Everything is just fine - I mean nothing is amazing or excellent. 
When you talk about a little girl, you can add a lot of sweet memories in here. Some humorous memories.  
secondly, it can be extended a lot. Add few more paras, and a few more memories. 
:D

Title article: My Own Personal Hell
Date: 2008-07-10 03:43:58

I like it. 
Atleast something fresh, something new. The rhyming is pretty good.  
The last two lines, and last seventh and eighth line are best.  
However, it would be better if you could extend it more. Adding two - three more paras.

Title article: Just Wait...
Date: 2008-07-10 03:39:02

Kitsch. 
Incomprehensible.  
Nothing different from the other thousand of poems out there. Get a FRESH idea, or a fresh presentation.

Title article: Ace Of Spades
Date: 2008-07-10 03:33:37

Excellent epiphany. It's a bit complex and confusing, but is still excellent. 
You use words very well. The style is amazing, just as I always say.

Title article: Test + Torture = Testure
Date: 2008-07-10 03:30:10

Not a masterpiece, but still amazing.  
You can do with extending it. The idea is amazing, and can be more exploited. 
The wordings, style are amazing.

Title article: Unwanted Praise
Date: 2008-07-10 03:26:34

Excellent. 
It cane become a lot better with more rhyming and deep sentences. But, nevertheless, the feelings are conveyed skillfully.

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