Posted by ams
2008-09-18 19:17:06
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this was excellent. its probably my favorite by you that ive read so far. definately one of the best poems that ive read today.
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Posted by allmine
2008-09-18 19:31:17
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Very sweet very touching and the mood I am in, very apropos. They only thing I would watch the cadence of the poem. Otherwise it was very well done. keep up the good work
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Posted by lemon
2008-09-18 21:07:03
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This was really sweet. I really liked this poem. It had a certain innocent quality about it that is very rare these days. I mean, holding hands.. how much more innocent can you be? LOVED it! =]
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Posted by harmattan
2008-09-19 07:27:04
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Yes. An aura of innocence and a desire for heartfelt intimacy in, yet, unrequited admiration.
Charming.
Let's hope the prince, (or princess) does not turn out to be a frog!
Harmattan
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Posted by Tarhead Mugwump
2008-09-19 12:05:28
hands
i was very well pleased with the overall body of the poem, but i have a personal thing about rhythm...
don't know why.
i kept trying to hold the piece to a beat and wasn't successful - fortunately, that doesn't mean that you were unsuccessful in your work.
write on!
*hmm... i just realized i used the phrase 'very well pleased' - what the heck is that all about i wonder (?). think i'll go sit in a corner or something.
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Posted by Amatayo
2008-09-24 21:12:28
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piece
of
real
crap
yuck
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