Posted by Helpless
2008-09-04 08:19:20
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No offense, but it sounds like you have some issues going on. This sounds more like a cry for help or attention more than a poem. I write things like this alot, but they are usually just to blow off steam. Sorry, but this did not do it for me.
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Posted by the Processor
2008-09-04 14:26:32
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Eh, not bad...think it's funny that a poem titled "It's Hard" is written in a form that almost looks like a....um..nevermind
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Posted by Zombie Punk
2008-09-04 14:32:21
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Ha! That's messed up, man.
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Posted by The 13th
2008-09-04 14:38:52
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Processor, if your lad is shaped like that.Get to the doctor quick lol
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Posted by the Processor
2008-09-04 14:42:30
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haha..I know! Bad Circumcision!! I kid, I kid, I feel gay (no offense to anyone) that I even posted that comment...sorry all!
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Posted by Pilgrim
2008-09-04 14:52:20
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This wasn't too bad. You seem to portay a hard life. I noticed a little repetion when you said it's hard to be me and then the last verse states its hard to be who I am. Maybe you can end with something like, I guess what's hard is just to be.
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Posted by harmattan
2008-09-04 17:30:02
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And you look like such a fun person from your foto....
What makes things diffucult, (I will avoid the H word and the school boy sniggerings)is your own self image.
Be you, and if anybody does not want to accept that, tell them that you are happy to accept them as they are and if they cannot reciprocate then they can take a running jump.
Harmattan.
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Posted by resistanceisfreedom
2008-09-04 18:50:53
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i think this was really good...because i felt that you were really putting something out there...it was simple but yet you were able to draw very complex emotions from it...well, i was able to at least. so that makes this a great piece in my mind. oh and don't mind these other idiots who say that it wasn't good enough. it was.
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Posted by garyowen
2008-09-05 00:59:49
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You conveyed lifes journey very well. An audible cry from the page. I guess easy just wouldn't cut it for a worthwhile existance
The simplicity works.
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Posted by Eternal_Bliss440
2008-09-05 19:08:35
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I like the story or message behind the poem and how the narrator thinks it's hard to be herself. THe one thing is it's hard repated every line kind of broken up the flow of thep oem a little bit. Maybe try using new words to describe the feelings expressed in the poem. but nice job
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