STORIES FROM CAMP 6, Chapter 1

THE RED HAT ( Dedicated to W.J.Martin)...

Elijah

The distant door closed shut behind him with a click....

Sundown in a Familiar City


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Written by m.b. timothy   
Saturday, 30 August 2008

behold that cinnamon sky

prevalent reds slowly subside

into the great oaks on the

crayola horizon

the Allegheny shimmers with

remaining copper sun and

goodnights the brothering Ohio.

wade I in the shallows of

Monongahela alone where

three rivers rally

sand wet creeps through 

my toes an anchoring embrace

for my constant meandering

    listening now as songbirds whistle their

    lasts of a long afternoon and reminds

    me of my mother humming in the steam

    of a stovetop boil. aroma most oriental and

    almost can I feel the warm settlings of

    ginger tea in my sundried stomach. Slumbering

    against the wind in silence gazing now at the

    laity of stars in the palmy night sky and

    imagine myself roosting on the crescent

    moon. with me, my mother the lackadaisy

    most cucumbersome. a sweet burden was

    I bestowed.



Copyright 2008 m.b. timothy
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Posted by r.e.potter
2008-08-30 14:04:29
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Didn't really understand it as I do so (not understand)with most poetry. But it read extremely well. I pictured the old west when I read this(though not sure why). Anyway, this seems to be a very good poem you have written.
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Posted by CliffMitchell
2008-08-30 15:02:36
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Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania where the three rivers rally and all yawn goodnight to the brothering Ohio. Great wording at the end with "lackadaisy"the combining of beauty in unenthusiasm, and "cucumbersome", the bittersweet: mother humming amongst stovetop boil, anxious hunger.
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Posted by harmattan
2008-08-30 16:39:06
Downsun

Keen not I on poems start "Behold".

Required not the antique way 'twas told.

Write again, but your verbs around turn

A poem better and ten from ten be earned.

Regards Kind

Mathartan
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Posted by Pilgrim
2008-08-30 17:37:39
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Did you mean "wet sand"? The imagery was very good. This reminds me of an introduction or the beginning of a descriptive chapter in a classic novel. YOu did fairly well.
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Posted by garyowen
2008-09-06 01:55:28
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Absolutely charming was the feeling this poem left in my mind

I love the connection with your mother. Very well written also.
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