my skin.

I see all of these scars

Covering my body.

I see your face in the

Mirror.

You don't look like

You love me.

You can't take away the pain

That you gave

my memories are stronger

 than your apologies

no matter what you say to me

my self-esteem will never be

what it used to be

I want to be the same people

I see everyday

You think you're helping me.

You think that you are

Changing everything thing

You believe to be worthless about me.

But all you change if my want

To love you.

Don't you see

How you control me.

You think you are God

And that you have the right

to put me down.

But I don't want to be

controlled any longer

Keyword: abuse

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Posted by antheerr 2008-08-23 14:42:48 .... Wow - this is really dark. You can feel the pain through the words. You seem to have chosen your words with care, and they have a powerful effect. This really shows the despair the speaker is feeling, and how hurt she (?) is and that nothing can help. Well done for getting the message across, but ouch at the amount of pain. + Report this comment
Posted by resistanceisfreedom 2008-08-23 16:40:22 .... yes, you always seem to get your message across very well in these poems that you write. again, i could feel the pain you were describing. and i think to some of this we can all relate. + Report this comment
Posted by Terry Collett 2008-08-24 12:35:13 .... I have no idea if this is a personal poem or fiction, but either way it is a dark, hurtfilled poem; well composed, words chosen carefully, images lucid. Good work. + Report this comment
Posted by lemon 2008-08-24 13:57:31 .... Great job. you've expressed emotion very well in this piece! This poem made me feel the pain you had described here, I think we've all been there at one point or another. =] + Report this comment
Posted by harmattan 2008-08-24 15:09:05 Same Run! Once you've made the decision. Run. Never go back. You create poems about people your mother warned you about, and you do it very well. I commented on your work in similar vein previously. You are successful at portraying one of the most difficult human feelings to put into words. Pain. Well done Harmattan + Report this comment
Posted by Tarhead Mugwump 2008-08-24 15:51:49 same i liked the overall piece, but got a little lost in the last stanza. in the words of the mighty spreadsheet god, it reads a little like a circular reference. the first two lines assign godlike qualities, then the rest of the stanza declare the opposite. justa thought from my feeble mind... write on! + Report this comment
Posted by Amatayo 2008-08-25 22:02:42 .... thinking. cuu. NRIS + Report this comment

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