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The Sandman


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Written by Lisa   
Friday, 22 August 2008
For anyone who is confused by something about the sandman being classified as horror, this is the Geman version of the Sandman. I came across the story of the Sandman while reading a book where the main character feels the villain is a Sandman-type character.

 

 

The Sandman

 

Sandman's a-coming my darling my sweet,

Looking through windows all down the street.

Looking for children still wide awake,

Close your eyes my dear, for safety's sake.

Your pretty little eyes, wide open and clear,

Go to sleep my dearest, my child, my dear.

The Sandman is coming, his owl in tow,

If you're not a-sleeping, I'm certain he'll know.

For the Sandman is not a figure of joy,

Bringing sweet dreams all night to all girls and boys.

The Sandman is frightening and a danger to thee,

For once you have seen him 'tis the last thing you'll see.

The Sandman and his owl stalk through the town,

Looking for children awake on their own.

Their pretty young eyes are what he desires,

As he strides past the houses, his own eyes like fires.

His owl is hungry and wants to eat soon,

The Sandman searches, under the moon.

A window - with light - an un-sleeping child,

Attracts the notice of this duo most wild.

Go to sleep naughty child, the danger comes near,

The Sandman is coming, you'd do well to fear.

His hands reaching out to hold you quite still,

While his companion, the owl, gobbles his fill.

Remember, my children, to sleep when you're told,

Don't lie awake, you're not yet too old,

That the Sandman will pass by, thinking you grown,

So sleep, my precious, my darling, my own.



Copyright 2008 Lisa
Keyword: The Sandman
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Comments (13)
Posted by r.e.potter
2008-08-22 10:15:52
really good

I love the song sandman by metalica...this was awesome as well. It flowed perfectly and had that sense of horror we all have come to know as sandman.
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Posted by Zombie Punk
2008-08-22 10:25:36
The Sandman

yeah i could totally imagine the dude from metalica singing this in that deep voice like from Enter Sandman.

I thought this was pretty cool and again had a sort of nursery rhyme feel to it, but like a demented nursery rhyme. maybe something the Grimm Brothers would have wrote.

Awesome job!

Cheers,

Max
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Posted by d.dasgupta
2008-08-22 10:32:22
Nicely done

This is a nicely done 'lullaby'? I guess every language has one or two of these. In the Bengali language, there is something quite similar, though much smaller. It talks about pirates coming to plunder the land.
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Posted by philneale1952
2008-08-22 11:50:14
Creeeeeepy

After 25 years I thought I knew you.

Quite clearly I was wrong.

Keeping lights all turned on from now on.

SPIDERZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZ

Dad
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Posted by alfred
2008-08-22 11:51:44
be afraid

Thanks for the nightmares ill have now anthler. Metalica rules.

Mommy, antheer is scaring me.

mommy,,,OH MY GOD SHES DEAD>
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Posted by antheerr
2008-08-22 11:59:09
Fear Rules

Response to previous 2 comments.

Dad - I have many hidden layers. I may start scaring you more. You know what I tend to read. I could easily get freakier. :-) Mwahahahaha.

Alfred - I'd say sorry for nightmares, but I am on commission with the Night Stallion (see Piers Anthony's Xanth), and get a bonus when I give them more work.
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Posted by Behind_the_Mask
2008-08-22 12:21:13
#$%

That was great,

I have no other words. Well perhaps it reminded me of something by American McGee. But that’s a different type of work all together, now I lost track of what I was saying. Oh well.

Keep up the great work.
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Posted by Kanarf
2008-08-22 13:02:23
good! but....

I enjoyed this. the flow was very good overall. there were just a few places where the flow felt broken:

-The rhymes in the third stanza felt forced.

-I assume that town and own were supposed to rhyme in the third stanza, but they don't. at least not where i come from.

-the rhyme in the very last line felt forced as well.
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Posted by antheerr
2008-08-22 13:07:45
Reply to Kanarf

Thanks for your comment.

I admit that in a couple of places I had to fight for a rhyme, and yes, town and own are very dubious, but the third and the last were both bits that flowed straight through my mind and fingers to the keys.
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Posted by villanova21
2008-08-22 17:57:03
Good Work

Good Work Lisa! I really dugg this, and I will be reading you often.

Keep up the good work.
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Posted by Andy6
2008-08-25 08:24:19
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Nicely concieved and a real timeless, classic feel to it. I'm thinking of reading it to my nipper, think it might do the trick? I like how this was inspired from an existing fable, you did well to make it yours.

Nice one.
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Posted by Something Indecent
2008-08-28 17:08:53
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Very creepy and good. This made me wish that I had something stalking my life when I was a child. I always think to myself, "Why can't more people try to kill me?" But on a serious note I really thought the flow and wording were very good. And as others said in their own distinct way, I could see this being lyrics for a song.

P.S. Enter Sandman is played out. Mr. Sandman is coming back.
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Posted by sebcoco
2008-10-13 13:17:45
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Wow! Very good stuff.

I liked it. It remembered a small part of my childhood.

As skilful as your father.

Seb.
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