A Ticket to Tewkesbury

A Ticket to Tewkesbury by Philip Neale, writing as...

STORIES FROM CAMP 6, Chapter 1

THE RED HAT ( Dedicated to W.J.Martin)...

The Sunset


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Written by Gregg   
Thursday, 21 August 2008

                I sat in the middle of the room and listened.  I heard many extraordinary sounds that I would normally shrug off as mundane: Birds singing, dogs barking, cars whooshing by.  They all sounded alive and happy.  Each sound was content as it abruptly came into existence and gradually faded away.  Eventually, I stopped naming the sounds' sources and heard only the sounds by themselves.  There were no birds, no dogs, no cars, no playful children, no angry mothers.  Only chirps, yelps, bumps, whooshes, bangs and thumps.  Each of them was content to simply come in and fade out.

                There was one sound that intrigued me more than any other.  It was by far the most majestic sound I had ever heard.  I had been hearing it all my life but never noticed it.  It was the sound of silence.  Silence lay behind all the other sounds.  All other sounds came into existence from the silence-the mother of all sound-and they all faded back into silence.  There were a few long stretches of time in which no other sound disturbed its mother.

                "How are you?" I asked the mother of sound.

                It did not answer.

I laughed at myself.  It started as a chuckle and ended in an uproar.  The irony!  I asked silence a question and expected a response!

                I opened my eyes.  I was startled because I forgot that I had closed them.  I had been listening for an hour or two.  Or perhaps 12 hours.  I couldn't tell.  I looked around the room and saw that objects were happy too.  I grew jealous of the grandfather clock, the television set, the old sofa, even the crumpled papers sitting in the waste basket.  They were all content.  They had nothing to strive for, nothing to gain, and nothing to be disappointed about.  They were content just to be.  I started to laugh again.  It started as a chuckle and ended in an uproar.  I called all these things mine and I always wanted more.  It was absurd to think that anything could actually belong to anybody.  I thanked the walls for their hospitality.

                I spotted a piece of paper on the table which I had forgotten about.  I picked it up and looked at it.  It was a poem-or an attempt at poetry-I wrote a day or two, maybe even a year previous.  I stared at it for a period of time somewhere between half a minute and an hour.  I stared at the paper and forgot what else I was supposed to do.  Then I realized that I was supposed to read it.  I looked at the words but could not bring myself to read.  I had forgotten how to do it.  Slowly, I managed to read the first line:

 

Come with me into this place

 

I read the words but could not make sense of them.  I read the line five or ten times-or maybe 100-before I comprehended the message it was trying to convey to me.  Over the course of an hour or two, or perhaps 12, I managed to read the entire poem in the same manner:

 

Come with me into this place

Those of you in search of grace

It is the void which you seek

Come inside and take a peek

 

You must come alone

But with many friends

For inside yourself

You must make amends

 

Once you have stepped inside

Be prepared for the coming tide

Only silence enters here

Be still and take it without fear

 

Breathe deep and slow with all your might

And what was taken for granted will come to light

No structure or time may enter here

Be still and take it without fear

 

Silence is the place where you begin to calm

The endless ripples of thought and qualm

Only then will two become one

You are sure to see it before you are done

 

Upon finishing, I thanked my previous self for the entertainment and put the sheet of paper back on the table. 

I suddenly became aware of the presence of a stranger.  I spun around as fast as I could to see if there was someone there.  There was no one to be seen.  I began to search my house to find the stranger whose presence I felt.  I did not search frantically.  There was no need.  I wasn't afraid.  I was curious.  I tried to contemplate why anyone else would be in my house.  I could not think of anything. I checked and rechecked every room in the house for an hour or two.  Or perhaps 12. 

After a while I took a break from searching and looked out the window.  The sun was setting and the sky was ablaze.  The sun was a half circle resting on the horizon.  It emitted a crown of fiery red extending in all directions.  Red faded into yellow, which faded into blue, which faded into the dark of the coming night.  All the colors danced around each other in celebration, bidding the day farewell.  Yellow clouds morphed and rippled as rays of fire struck them and scattered in all directions.  I had seen many sunsets exactly like this before, but none of them looked quite like this one.

Whilst staring into the sunset a realization struck me.  I recognized the presence that I felt.  It wasn't a stranger at all.  In fact, it was someone I knew-or thought I knew-very well.  It was myself. 

"Who are you?" I asked myself.

"Who wants to know?" he answered.



Copyright 2008 Gregg
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Posted by antheerr
2008-08-21 16:34:37
Deep

I liked this. It had a nice pace to it - slow and measured, but not so slow you lost interest. Lots of different angles and ways of looking at things, and I liked how you brought a poem into it too.

Nice ending - the big question - who am I?

I really liked this. Please keep on.
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Posted by harmattan
2008-08-21 17:15:16
Sunset

I THINK it is a ghost story, the guy is haunting himself.

It was certainly a fascinating readful of good wordsmithing.

Enjoyed your skill.

Kind regards

Harmattan
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Posted by resistanceisfreedom
2008-08-21 20:02:48
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this was very good and i liked the poem that was in here as well. my favorite part had to be the description of the sunset....i have never read anything quite like that before. and the ending was perfect.
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Posted by Kanarf
2008-08-21 20:52:07
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Ghost story eh? That's an interesting interpretation. I was thinking more along the lines of buddhism or meditation or hallucinogenic drugs, but interpret it as you will.
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Posted by philneale1952
2008-08-22 02:05:30
Conflicting Styles

I likd the interplay between the poetry and the prose.

No-one seems to have tried that on here before,a dn it worked very well.

Stephen's hint about the supernatural had me off in another direction for a while, but I came back down to the fact that it's a good read anyway.

Phil
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Posted by Yasac
2008-08-22 13:19:38
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ghost story, drugs, meditation...wow the whole time it reminded me of guy The Tell Tale Heart without all the ryhming. Though it would have been so much more awesome if you made the whole thing ryhme, but thats just what separates people like Edgar Allan Poe from the rest of us.
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