The tide crawls gently up,

its watery tendrils on the shore.

Then goes back to the ocean,

taking opportunist scribblings in the sand.

Those who witness it take nothing from it.

The waves take and don't give back.

Thoughts and dreams swirling in the ocean.

Minds and ideas never to be seen by human eyes. 

Keyword: The Ungrateful Waves

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Posted by Behind_the_Mask 2008-08-20 15:58:55 hmm it is beyond me what you are trying to get through here but then again perhaps it is like the ideas we as writers give everyone and when time comes to have some credit given to us thoes who have taken the ideas keep it all to theirselves? Who knows? + Report this comment
Posted by *Spike 2008-08-20 16:24:43 The Ungrateful Waves Thought provoking piece. The writer seems to have suffered disappointments in their past, and now view life wistfully, as well as cynically. + Report this comment
Posted by lemon 2008-08-20 16:44:39 .... I thought this was well written and it was very mysterious. The similarities between the waves and thoughts were very good. At least thats what I got from it :) + Report this comment
Posted by villanova21 2008-08-20 16:53:50 poetry I liked what you did with this piece, and watever you meant by it is right with me. Keep it up! + Report this comment
Posted by resistanceisfreedom 2008-08-20 19:24:54 .... i thought this was absolutely brilliant. everything about it was perfection, at least in my mind. really great read! + Report this comment
Posted by Terry Collett 2008-08-21 11:12:10 .... Rather objective poem this, as if you were just describing an event; but you have described it well, chilly, but good. + Report this comment
Posted by hey_hey_paula 2008-08-21 12:40:34 Yay! I really liked it. I think the cryptic quality the poem possesses contributes to the charm of the poem. It's refreshing to see writing that does not have a singular meaning but one that can connect with many types of readers. Write on! I'll be looking forward to your writing. + Report this comment
Posted by Ashutosh 2008-08-28 07:52:01 .... Good poem. I like the way its written from the point of view of the waves. + Report this comment

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