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STORIES FROM CAMP 6, Chapter 1

THE RED HAT ( Dedicated to W.J.Martin)...

SECOND SEX.


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Written by Terry Collett   
Wednesday, 20 August 2008
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She and Dave copulated
In the woods behind her house;
There amongst the trees and sharp
Bushes, with birdsong over

 

Head, a dull sky peering through
Tall treetops, she feeling a
Chill beneath her naked back,
Dave's rough coat rubbing her thighs,

 

And he, breathing hard, speaking
In that hurried pace, the words
Speckling against her face,
Then taking flight in the air

 

Like wild, frighten birds, taking
Wing, while she sensing his one
Final thrust, gave nothing there
Away, either in word or

 

Touch, because it was all too
Little, about all too much.



Copyright 2008 Terry Collett
Keyword: SECOND SEX.
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Comments (9)
Posted by r.e.potter
2008-08-20 07:43:00
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Wow...A different angle for you. Thought it was spot on(no pun intended)

I think this is one of my fav's from you.

This recieves five strokes...I mean stars.
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Posted by Helpless
2008-08-20 08:11:50
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I enjoyed this very much. Sultry poem that really makes a person think.....Also, I have always found the word copulate "dirty" in that sense. Weird huh?
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Posted by sTiCkFiGuRe
2008-08-20 09:14:16
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Just like me,,,sex in a second.
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Posted by allmine
2008-08-20 10:17:06
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Great poem as always. Talking about something exotic without being pornographic. It can be done. And I am female and won't give it five strokes...but I do love the picture!
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Posted by harmattan
2008-08-20 14:08:54
second sex

Does the title indicate how long it all took?

Right choice of words. Copulate is what animals do with no thought other than to procreate.

Not one erotic word here. Clever.

I really appreciate the way your words tumble and your concepts traverse the discipline of the lines.

Sent me to bed shaken, but not stirred.

Kind regards

Harmattan
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Posted by lemon
2008-08-20 16:29:05
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Nicely done. it felt like there was a lot going on here besides the actual ACT in the bushes. It was very descriptive, but not overly graphic.

Good job :)
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Posted by nick711
2008-08-20 20:42:12
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This is an angle I didn't expect from you, but I really liked it. Not very graphic, which I respect, but at the same time it was very passionate, the scene you painted made it seem like hushed affection, almost unrequited. Thats just my take on it.

Keep it up.
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Posted by d.dasgupta
2008-08-21 01:36:10
The two steps

Did you mean 'Like wild, frightened birds, ...'?

I liked the end -- 'too little, about all too much.' The exact opposite of 'Much ado about nothing!'

You transcended the barriers of physical intimacy and used the ACT as a ladder as though, meant to reach the mind. And this makes, at least to me, the title 'Second Sex' most meaningful. The first step is taken, but the second one, the 'all too much' remains unexplored.

I may have interpreted you incorrectly. But does it matter? I liked it anyway.
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Posted by Dirkin
2008-08-22 00:18:40
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The title caught my attention, but it was another excellent and worthy poem that I found. Good to see you at your best Terry. I think this showed the desperate nature of sex sometimes, hurried, awkward and intense
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