Posted by Ashutosh
2008-08-20 03:53:05
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What is a filigree?
Seems to me like this hauiku is talking about two difefrent things happening simultaneously..
the filigree swinging on the girls face and sunlight peeping through the branch
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Posted by Zombie Punk
2008-08-20 04:23:23
Her Face -- A Hakiu
I do not have a clue on what a filigree is but nonetheless you were able to paint a picture in my head.
I saw a girl with long brown hair on a swing set by an apple tree, and a glare of light from the sun is shiny through the leaves and branches of the apple tree and onto her face.
Cheers,
Max
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Posted by Terry Collett
2008-08-20 05:59:13
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Art sometimes can be deceptive in that it appears simple and artless and yet therein lies the real art. Good poem, good haiku.
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Posted by r.e.potter
2008-08-20 07:56:25
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I could picture this...great job with this haiku. As always,,enjoy your pieces.
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Posted by lemon
2008-08-20 15:56:32
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Good job with this. Simple and direct, but very subtle. I liked this very much.
For such a short verse (as all haikus are) it was well described and easy to picture. =]
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Posted by resistanceisfreedom
2008-08-20 15:57:50
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i agree with everyone else...this was enjoyed. very beautiful Haiku.
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Posted by whendarknessrises
2008-08-20 17:06:08
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this was great!
thanx for the note on the bottome telling us what filigree is. otherwise I would have never known. very very nice.
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Posted by whendarknessrises
2008-08-20 17:06:13
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this was great!
thanx for the note on the bottome telling us what filigree is. otherwise I would have never known. very very nice.
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Posted by Dirkin
2008-08-24 21:59:51
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I pictured my girlfriends face when I read this. If a haiku paints a mental picture, this one succeeded perfectly
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Posted by Kanarf
2008-08-26 08:11:04
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I'm no expert on haikus, but the fact that the entire poem consists of one sentence makes me wonder if it fits the qualifications for a haiku.
Great imagery, though
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Posted by nick711
2008-08-28 07:52:51
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When I saw this on you're list of stories, I thought: A Haiku? Should be easy enough.
But with ease and only a few words you achieved the power of an epic.
I have no idea what a filigree is. Oh, here it is.
noun- delicate and intricate ornamentation
That makes sense. I should add this to my vocabulary.
Great haiku.
Best of luck.
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Posted by Pilgrim
2008-09-04 14:23:49
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I'm very thankful that you wrote the definition for that word. I was just about to reach for my dictionary when your definition caught my eye. Anyway, this was good.
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Posted by Ruby Whispers
2008-10-05 15:41:09
Touching
It is easy to close your eyes and imagine the pattern on the womans cheek. Feel the warmth of the sunlight as it decorates her. I liked this one a lot.
J
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