Hoping The Sun Doesn't Rise

Reality, it has fallen out of my hands

This world, gives birth to lies it will never understand

When change confronts me, I always shield my face

Because of you, I have managed to lose my place

Abused and sore, I remain broken hearted

My clarity it seems I have discarded

All that time I spent with you was in vain

Even now you're still a ****, you haven't changed

Still playing the same tiring games

Selling your broken in body to ease your fabricated pain

I'm wondering if the sex makes you feel like you're home and safe

Where daddy is there once again healing the cuts that you make

But I guess it's too late, we all lose our ways

Forever you will be ****** again and again in your cage

But you aren't even the problem anymore

It's all this hurt that has washed ashore

I don't know just what to do with all the torment I hold

I always receive nothing, but always do what I'm told

And is this as good as it gets,

Living this life with so many regrets

But I will hope for the sun not to rise

I'm hoping to clean the blood from out my eyes

The beautiful stars will burn out and fade away

Angels will descend to wrap me in their arms, full of decay

And no longer will I have to tolerate,

Every ghost that brings fear will evaporate

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Posted by Zombie Punk 2008-08-18 18:21:17 Hoping The Sun Doesn't Rise Oh shit, this was an awesome Poem. Yeah, it had some depressing stuff in it but the way you make it flow is unbelievably spectacular. I really liked this one a lot. I also this this is the first Poem I read of yours that had a Adult Content warning. Cheers, Max + Report this comment
Posted by b.k. 2008-08-18 20:58:56 .... the content was amazing and your flow was flawless...your poems always have intense meaning, but there was something about this that made it more powerful (and it wasn't necessarily the language)...sorry, i'm a terrible commenter so that's all i have to offer + Report this comment
Posted by lemon 2008-08-18 21:12:46 .... Great! You did a wonderful job with using longer and shorter lines while still keeping the flow. The content was very well written. I got what you were conveying immediately. Great Job as always =] + Report this comment
Posted by darrinbouley 2008-08-19 07:29:12 Ouch... Why, why, why dost thou choose to wrench my heart just so? I feel your pain. But know that time really does heal all wounds. The writing was particularly strong. Sorry my reading pleasure comes at a cost to you... + Report this comment
Posted by harmattan 2008-08-19 12:27:45 Rising Sun If you want to evaporate every ghost that brings fear then you must believe that angels may wrap you in their arms WITHOUT the decay. Sorry. I am not one of those reviewers who allows, or even revels in, the morbidity of self-pitying or pessimistic poets wallowing in buckets full of grief. Where there is life there is hope might be a cliche. but so are morbid poets. I will try some of your humour and see how we get on. Kind regards Harmattan + Report this comment
Posted by r.e.potter 2008-08-19 16:45:14 .... Wow, your poems have always been depressing, but now you throw in choice words to really send the message home. Good job + Report this comment
Posted by resistanceisfreedom 2008-08-19 17:23:13 .... okay, well then Harmattan.....if you really don't like morbid poets and can't understand what they are writing then it's simple......just stay out of my poetry....i mean isn't it obvious to you that my poems are all pretty much morbid...so then my question to you would be why do you keep commenting. so just let my poetry alone then if you can't stand "morbid poets" and the three stars thing is getting old....i hope you aren't rating this three stars specifically because it is morbid, because if you are then please stop commenting, rating my stuff. i mean i can't stop you from commenting but you've made it clear that you don't like my kind of writing so then just leave it alone and take a hike. there's plenty of other writers to comment on this site. + Report this comment
Posted by Dr Lucifer 2008-08-19 18:20:42 Wow! The pain is so real. I do hope this was not a true life experience for you. Without trying to get too philosophical I'll just say we felt your pain too. And that is all the proof I need to know that this is good stuff. + Report this comment
Posted by Eternal_Bliss440 2008-08-20 11:21:02 .... Once again I'm amazing at your writing. THis poem flows really well nad the content is just extraordinary. Sometimes its easier to write dark pieces than happy and full of hope. You are a fabulous poet and I'm looknig forward to more of your work + Report this comment
Posted by CliffMitchell 2008-08-22 08:45:43 .... i thought this poem was good. a slimmed mild version of confessional poetry like that of sexton's, plath's or even william de witt's. i feel like you have good imagery, my only suggestion would be to phrase in a more peculiar way, but that is i. you know my style! good work! + Report this comment
Posted by JonStalk 2008-08-22 21:11:59 Wow!!! Speechless for a moment. Your straightforwardness is bold, to say the least. I loved the first line, and as I read along I felt like I'd been punched in the face. But that's a good thing. I felt what you were conveying; I've been there before, as many have, I'm sure, and you know something? When someone out there is going through some kind of pain, and to read about it in a work like this, there is no greater catharsis. Nice poem!!! + Report this comment
Posted by garyowen 2008-08-23 02:42:47 .... Its alway darkest just before the dawn. This piece was well written even if a little morbid for some. From my personal point of view i connected with the poem And i guess it left me pondering tthe dilema that each new sunrise cares to remember. + Report this comment
Posted by nick711 2008-08-23 14:59:51 .... Flawless poem. I noticed the change of content with your writing in this one but only made it more powerful. Keep it up. + Report this comment
Posted by Forsaken 2008-08-24 10:17:09 Good. I think this poem was good. I think this because it flows well and makes the reader think about it. Some of the rhyming might have been better, but only slightly. I think you did a good job in writing this but you could create a longer poem maybe? It's a great poem by the way. Good job Jessica + Report this comment
Posted by resistanceisfreedom 2008-08-27 17:45:50 .... exaggerated??? none of the sorrow that i write about is fucking exaggerated...and yea, i'll answer your next question...some of my sorrow does come from myself....but it is not all me who brings depression. the sluts know who they are. that's all i have to say. exaggerated???? what the fuck is your problem?? + Report this comment
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