Posted by r.e.potter
2008-08-16 17:04:45
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I think u need to be on acid to understand this poem Jag(btw,,thats a cool name). This poem is just way to deep for me to comprehend.
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Posted by Tarhead Mugwump
2008-08-16 19:07:10
yeah...
i've got to admit that i got a little lost in the midst of the poem.
i was actually good right up to the part where the green fluffy monkeys enter...
unless, of course, i read the last two lines first, then proceed to the top.
probably a handicap on my behalf rather than yours.
write on!
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Posted by shagufta
2008-08-16 19:23:58
Dark
I am no afficionado of dark elements but your poem gives me something to munch over. I am sure you were not in your brightest of the moods. Seems likes Hades to me.
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Posted by Zombie Punk
2008-08-16 19:27:41
B
You better watch out for those treacherous green fluffy monkeys, man. They're skin you alive and feed your inards to their halflings.
Right ....
Anyways, I think this was pretty trippy and humorous. I liked it.
Cheers,
Max
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Posted by Eternal_Bliss440
2008-08-16 20:23:26
Cool
I liked the dark feel behind it but I have to admit I got lost in the middle. The choice of words you had confused me. Plus the way you had them in the that ordered aded more to the confusion. Maybe if you added simplier words, it would make it flow better. Also I didn't understand the title
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Posted by chaabuk
2008-08-16 22:43:28
Mind game
My interpretation is: The mind is giving wat to dark and evil thoughts but you are determined to defy them or cave in. The monkeys actually are vampires, who cannot face daylight. They are creatures of night as much as mind's recesses and the darkness. So is the B standing for your acid BURNS! Thought-provoking.
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Posted by cuzy
2008-08-17 02:53:25
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The title is intriguing even though the poem did not leave its mark with me. But then, you have the poetic liberty to cut it any which way. I am not intelligent enough for this.
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Posted by June Eclipsis
2008-08-17 13:37:20
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I like this poem for its deepness. After all, a poem is what describes life from a different perspective (or perhaps the same). I don't know why a lot of people hate deep poems. I guess they're only fit to reading instruction manuals.
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Posted by harmattan
2008-08-20 05:45:40
B
I really liked this one.
It can be interpreted ten different ways on ten differet levels.
And I have been to eight of them myself.
Glad you have the guaranteed protective quilt.
When I was a lad you had to be innoculated against demons and it was very expensive, and not available on NHS.
Happy for the new technology, so much more important than an Xbox
Kind regards
Harmattan
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