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A Ticket to Tewkesbury

A Ticket to Tewkesbury by Philip Neale, writing as...

The Cautionary Tale of Bert


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Written by Jag Blane   
Thursday, 14 August 2008

There was a time not so long ago,

When there were things that lived below.

They scurried around under the earth

And this is the tale of one called Bert.

Now Bert was a funny fellow;

Especially as his skin was bright yellow.

He also had some green bits too,

But I won't tell which bits where blue!

Berts only wish was to go above ground

So he could find a stylish gown.

For he thought, he could impress

His friends with his skills to cross dress,

But what poor Bert did not know,

Was if sunlight touched him he would go

Instantly up in a puff of smoke,

But not enough to make you choke.

So Bert went off and dug a hole,

Off towards his fabled goal,

And once he found a dress,

(With which he thought he would impress)

He called his friends up through the hole,

So they could see his dress and shoal.

But it really was time for them to go

For the first ray of light was about to show.

So as the sun shone down,

It scorched poor Bert in his gown.

It also burnt up all his friends,

So this is where his tale ends.

Now if there is one thing to be learnt

That unless you want to get burnt.

When out shopping never be slow,

And always remember when it's time to go.



Copyright 2008 Jag Blane
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Comments (7)
Posted by chaabuk
2008-08-14 16:12:07
Ha! Haa!! Haaa!!!

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Posted by Zombie Punk
2008-08-14 16:12:41
The Cautionary Tale of Bert

I thought some of the lines were unnecessary but other then that I thought this was a pretty amusing tale. I also thought some of the rhymes were there just to rhyme, which made it discomforting. That's a good message you have there, though. hehe.

Cheers,

Max
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Posted by Tarhead Mugwump
2008-08-14 16:13:09
well then.

that had a real nice sing-song sort of thing going on. very nice rhythm that allowed the poem to just lope along at a nice pace.

really enjoyed it front to back!

write on!
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Posted by r.e.potter
2008-08-14 16:15:32
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Thought this would make a cute children poem. But then I got further into it and realized a child would not understand...second thought,,neither do I. Gave it a 4 cause it rhymed really well.
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Posted by chaabuk
2008-08-14 16:15:47
Bert had Blurted

you really had a funny tale. And I must say, you have gladdened the cockles of my heart. Ha haa haaa. So Bert got burnt. His friends got burnt. And we learnt a lesson. NEVER NEVER BE LATE!
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Posted by chaabuk
2008-08-14 16:19:12
Third

I promised you, I will give you three comments if you pleased me. So here it goes. (Although I could make it five.) If you keep on writing like this, you will get more comments. Bert has truly stolen my heart (and I want it back.) Poor fellow!
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Posted by Helpless
2008-08-15 04:50:45
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I thougt this was funny. I enjoyed this very much. Maybe because I could not get the vision of Bert from Sesame Street out of my head. (Hey I have a three year old. I am forced to watch it.

Thanks for a light hearted story this morning.
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