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Written by Dipankar Dasgupta   
Thursday, 14 August 2008
ImageIt was a typical winter evening in Kolkata. Velvety and mellow.

 

Yet Mrinal was sweating. He had been sweating since the previous day. Lovely Priya had promised to visit his home. She was a classmate in college. Mrinal had been staring endlessly at her since college started. Inside as well as outside the college.

 

Nothing mattered. Except for Priya returning a smile. Except for her shining eyes and her fascinating face.

 

He had found the courage to visit her home. To try and see her alone. But she lived with a sister and an aunt. He ended up entertaining the ladies with intelligent conversation. But Priya remained a distant dream.

 

There was no point chatting with her in Coffee House. Too much competition there. A quiet little nook was the call of the day!

 

Mrinal struggled and finally managed to accomplish the impossible.

 

'Say, why don't you visit us one of these days?' he uttered as casually as possible, keeping the quiver out of his voice. He was careful to use the word 'us' instead of 'me'. Priya should know that he lived with his parents. There was a moat at least that Mrinal would need to cross even in his own house. But Priya didn't appear to be overly worried.

 

'Sure. Why don't you draw me a map? I'd love to see your home.'

 

Mrinal wrote down the address and drew the map, ensuring that his nervous fingers didn't reveal instead the way into the hidden recess of his mind.

 

He bought two tickets for his parents to watch the latest Uttam Kumar movie. It was a craze and he knew they would love the trip.

 

'I never buy you presents,' he told his mom. 'It's always the other way round,' he said smiling. 'This time I pay and you enjoy. See? I am not the spendthrift you believe me to be. I saved this money out of my income from the tuitions I give.'

 

The elderly couple found it hard to hide their tears of joy and by quarter past five in the afternoon, he had managed to pack them off. And then he waited, heart thumping.

 

Would she keep her word? He did not have enough confidence in himself to expect the impossible to happen. But it did. The door bell rang and she waited there as gorgeous as ever, in a cream coloured silk saree and a soft grey cardigan. She wore no jewellery, but the warmth of her smile compensated.

 

He welcomed her into the empty house. She didn't ask questions, but she looked around the living room expecting a voice or two from adjacent rooms. Nothing but silence greeted her. If she was surprised, she hid her reaction with ease.

 

Mrinal was well prepared. He had a recording of a Royal Shakespeare Company production and he asked her if she would care to listen to some of the greatest actors from England.

 

'Which play?' she asked.

 

'You guess,' said he in response and then turned on the player. In tune with a soft piano in the background, a young man's voice said:

 

'Wouldst thou withdraw it? For what purpose, love?'

 

And a woman's charming voice whispered back:

 

'But to be frank, and give it thee again.

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My bounty is as boundless as the sea,

My love as deep; the more I give to thee,

The more I have, for both are infinite. ...'

 

Mrinal moved to a chair next to her. He knew it would be too melodramatic to tell her it was Romeo and Juliet that was playing. He leaned towards her instead and asked, 'Do you recognize the play?'

 

She frowned, trying to figure out. Mrinal didn't know if she knew, but it was immaterial. The sensuous melody of the piano said all he wanted to say. He shifted closer. The perfume she wore reached out to him. She adjusted her saree across her left shoulder as she sat more cosily in her chair. The silk rustled, touching Mrinal's hand for a brief second.

 

Silence reigned supreme as Priya turned sideways and smiled at Mrinal. The frown had disappeared. Her hands lay placidly on her lap.

 

'Is this an invitation,' Mrinal thought.

 

His hand inched closer in her direction when a harsh noise disturbed the scene.

 

The doorbell!

 

Mrinal almost jumped in alarm. It was too early for his parents to return. He waited, struggling not to lose his composure, when the bell rang again.

 

'Oh s***!' he said silently, as he gnashed his teeth and went over to answer the door. An aunt, this time Mrinal's, stood there with her teenage daughter. They were regular visitors and did not need to keep anyone informed about their visits. Without waiting to be invited in, they came and crashed on a couch. And then, noticing Priya, they stared at her curiously for a while.

 

'Where's your mother,' asked the aunt, suspicion plainly written on her face.

 

Mrinal stammered 'They have gone to see a movie ...'

 

It was a bombshell. The aunt and her daughter immediately transferred their attention to Priya, studying her with deep attention now.

 

Priya stood up. She was obviously uncomfortable. 'It's getting late,' she smiled politely. 'Can you please give me the book I came for?'

 

For a second, Mrinal was dumbfounded. 'Book?' he asked and then understanding dawned. Priya may not have known Romeo and Juliet by heart, but she certainly had better presence of mind than Mrinal.

 

'Oh yes, the book ...' Mrinal disappeared inside the house and came out with a copy of David Ricardo's Principles of Political Economy and handed it over to Priya. She looked at the book and her eyes twinkled. She was not an Economics major!

 

'Thanks a lot,' she said and disappeared through the front door into the foggy darkness of the Kolkata winter. Mrinal, swearing under his breath, came back and sat down to entertain the guests.

 

They conversed idly for a while, Mrinal keeping up the show in monosyllables. The aunt and the cousin were bored soon and decided to leave. But Mrinal knew that Priya was now at least halfway back to her home.

 

He recalled the aunt at Priya's home and shook his head violently. 'Pretty little aunts, do you know what damage you've caused?' he yelled in loud despair.  

 

Something like a reply greeted him from the corner of the empty room. He stared at the audio player with vicious but impotent rage. It was still on.

 

The play had progressed in the meantime he realized, for he heard a dying Mercutio deliver his immortal line:

 

'Ay, ay, a scratch, a scratch; marry, it's enough.'

 

 

 



Copyright 2008 Dipankar Dasgupta
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Comments (18)
Posted by philneale1952
2008-08-14 06:40:13
Enjoyable

Very good exercise in irony, and the last line said it all.

We've all been there at some time, and the 'Best Laid Plans of Mice and Men Gang Aft A'glay'

Good read.

Phil
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Posted by Ashutosh
2008-08-14 11:42:30
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Good story, DD.

What struck me most was the very simple style of writing - short, simple sentences, and the everyday common feel about the narration.

Uttam Kumar movie...who's that? some latest Bengali movie sensation? or some old actor?

I didn't know Kolkata had that kind of winters. I've seen Delhi winters and Lucknow winters. They are quite the same, except the difference in population, space and place. Maybe Kolkata has a different kind of winter. I've never been there. Maybe I will sometime.

As Phil said, good read!
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Posted by Ashutosh
2008-08-14 11:44:13
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Forgot to rate it.
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Posted by r.e.potter
2008-08-14 15:35:16
good

Leave it to your relatives to blow a good thing for ya. Your story has a touch of humor and a bit of drama thrown in. Enjoyed it,,,but Mrinal should really get his own place. Its hard to score when your parents are in the next room,,,but good tactic to get them out of the house.

The last line was a good touch.
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Posted by alfred
2008-08-15 09:55:19
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Priya seems like a nice piece of butt. Funny that you need to get your parents out so you can bang her. I can relate cause im 41 and still live at home also....oh gotta get off computer,,,my mommy is home.
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Posted by d.dasgupta
2008-08-15 10:24:20
To Alfred

Great sense of humour. Thanks.
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Posted by Dr Lucifer
2008-08-15 17:35:15
Enjoyable

Excellent story. It reminds me of my younger years when I was in love but didn't know what to do about it. I think it's very true to life for a lot of people. Good job.
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Posted by prithwish.nath
2008-08-17 00:20:46
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Oh this was really great. The last line, as almost everyone has said, drips awesomeness. In context to the story, I mean.

I really liked the short, to the point sentences. Oh,for those wondering, the timeframe of this story must be a while back..judging from the Uttam Kumar reference :)

Great, on the whole.

P.S. Didn't know fellow bengalis to be on storiesville. Pleasant surprise :)
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Posted by darrinbouley
2008-08-17 17:21:49
Well written...

Thank you for sharing this story. I especially appreciated the intimate look into a culture of which I know very little. You developed a nice sense of passion, yearning, and romantic overtones to make it quite believable. And I could feel the main character's pain/angst with the unexpected arrival of his relatives. Talk about having your hopes dashed! Oh, well... Very nice job with this story. Keep up the solid writing.
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Posted by Forsaken
2008-08-18 12:58:26
nice

I enjoyed this very much, I thought that the way you took the time to set the scene was really effective; I found the pace perfect, you could have skipped through without much detail, but you didn't, which was good. Your a skilled writer, you should write more like this!

*Thumbs up*

Jess
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Posted by Storyer
2008-08-18 20:59:53
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Great pacing. You painted a very vivid atmosphere. I like. Not sure if these are typos... but somewhere midway you have Priya saying "I am getting late" and you have Mrinal cursing "Pretty little aunts" (plural?). I'm just nitpicking b/c there's nothing structurally wrong with the story. I really enjoyed it.
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Posted by Kanarf
2008-08-21 15:26:25
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Very engaging. It kept me reading all the way through.

I especially like this line:

"Mrinal wrote down the address and drew the map, ensuring that his nervous fingers didn't reveal instead the way into the hidden recess of his mind. "
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Posted by harmattan
2008-08-21 17:54:55
Priya

Once again that panorama of a different culture..

and I guess that local way of expressing oneself in English...

and a glimpse into the traditions and customs which might restrict you.

Time and place painted so well.

Well chosen quotes.

You are a craftsman in words sir.

Sent to bed in a good mood.

Kind regards

Harmattan
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Posted by topsyturvywords
2008-08-21 19:00:18
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one of the best stories here. I just added your stori in my fave bulks...this is great...you made the story understandable and it's very easy to picture out... the best :)
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Posted by iRant
2008-08-23 21:51:06
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great job, thought the use of romeo and juliet was a great way to end the piece. thought the plot was good, not the most creative, but the overall quality was good.
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