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Ignorance You Have Chosen
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Written by Sorrow Is My Mask   
Wednesday, 13 August 2008

 

Ignorance You Have Chosen

 

 

Sharp needles find their way into my eyes

The blood runs down, this world remains a giant lie

 

And I'm trying to get these wings off the ground

But sick people like you keep holding me down

 

Just why is it that you won't let me escape

Time and time again, it is my head that you rape

 

Can't you just let me go, allow me to flee

There is not one thing you can show me to make me believe

 

This place just wasn't meant for me all along

The minute I came out of the womb, everything felt wrong

 

But you can't see, you can't accept my choice

You preach about hope, but you won't give me a voice

 

My wings, they remained bolted to the ground

I cry out to you, but you act like you never hear the sound

 

I guess ignorance is what you've chosen for us

Built it up to only rip it down, in you I can no longer trust



Copyright 2008 Sorrow Is My Mask
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Comments (10)
Posted by Zombie Punk
2008-08-13 21:05:14
Ignorance You Have Chose

Great Poem, man!

Title was nicely chosen and this flowed quite nice. I thought this stanza "but you can't see, you can't accept my choice/you preach about hope, but you won't give me a voice" is really thought-provoking.

This was greatly enjoyed.

Cheers,

Max
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Posted by allmine
2008-08-14 10:52:56
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This si a great poem about oppression. Shows how the character feels like he has no voice and feels like he is tied down. I think I just reitterated what you wrote. I love your poetry it is always so dark
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Posted by Eternal_Bliss440
2008-08-14 15:02:43
Really deep poem

I can really get the sense of what the poem is talking about and it is short and sweet. That enables you to put some great description without using too many words. I really like how you rhymed in each couplet. Good job
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Posted by lemon
2008-08-14 16:32:16
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Nice job. I really felt the frustration in this poem. the way you described feeling ignored and silent was great.

My wings, they remained bolted to the ground

I cry out to you, but you act like you never hear the sound

very intense.
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Posted by Codi_Del_Rossi
2008-08-14 18:14:58
Good

I really liked this. It strikes a very personal cord, because I have felt like this so many times. I like the line about having your wings bolted down. I can picture the image clearly.
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Posted by d.dasgupta
2008-08-15 23:32:15
Very well written

I think this is the first time I am reading your poetry. I enjoyed it thoroughly, but I also thought, as I was reading you, that the theme of your poem fits your name -- Sorrow is My Mask. Of course, I don't know what's behind the mask.

The first two lines hit me real hard and whatever followed made perfect sense. I admit that sometimes I struggle with similar sentiments, but I try to hide my face behind a mask too. In my case, it's called humour.

Since I don't know the answers to the questions you ask, I guess I laugh at my impotence as furiously as I can.

As I said, I enjoyed reading you.
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Posted by Ashutosh
2008-08-15 23:45:47
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Nice poem. I get it. Very well expressed.

Ignorance, though some may call it bliss, for their own reasons, mainly comfort and a sense of security, is really a most destructive thing.

Those who become aware of this ignorance either become cynical, pessimistic or they end up in an asylum. But I think there is a way out of the whole mess without becoming any of these, or anything else for that matter.

Your poem here focusses more on the frustration of seeing it all and wanting to get out of it but being unable to do so. I think the wanting to get out is the problem. That is what keeps you in. Because the momemnt you see it and say: "It is so" and do not move, you are already out.

Nice poem. Forgive me if I have unnecessarily burdened you with the philosophy, which by the way is not a phislosophy. Just plain old common sense, which is very uncommon by the way.
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Posted by resistanceisfreedom
2008-08-16 09:16:49
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No, you didn't burden me. i really enjoyed reading your comment. it's nice to see people expanding their comments to paragraphs instead of two sentences. thank you.
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Posted by Something Indecent
2008-08-19 15:03:44
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Good.

Poem.

I was going to post that as a joke but I just couldn't do it. I liked the message of being held back by those close to you whom you'd like to free yourself of. I can really connect to this.

Good.

Poem.
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Posted by Terry Collett
2008-09-08 01:44:37
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You use the couplets vey well and do so in a way that still sounds modern and on the ball, and tackling the now problems and the inner doubts and anxities. I enjoy your poems as art not the pain and anxiety within them.
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