I'm searching for,

The perfect metaphor,

The symbol to represent,

How i feel, where I am, the place that I'm in,

And how this never stops once it begins,

And it all comes out so cliche,

But I'm desperate, so I'll try them all out anyway,

I'm drowning, I'm dying, I'm choking on my words,

I'm frozen, imprisoned, I'm stuck here under glass,

I'm a leper, I'm water, I'm a walking cliche,

A ghost, invisible, I'm nothing at all,

So I steal another rhythm,

I steal another line,

Nothing I write,

can I truly call Mine,

So I rob my heroes again,

I steal from the stars,

To try and dance, if at least for one night,

with their muse,

I'm weak selfish and lazy,

I don't know what I'm looking for,

Inspiration, I suppose,

It comes, it comes and it goes,

My message is getting lost,

It's not coming across at all. 

**NOTE - I am sure some of you will not be into the rhyme scheme here (or in places, the lack thereof).  As is the case with most of my poems, this is a song.  It works with the music quite well.  I like not rhyming.  Rhyme is great, but sometimes can feel cheesey when forced.  Feel free to crucify it if you think it sucks, though.  I'm a big boy and can take some constructive criticism.

Keyword: Plagiarism

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Posted by Ashutosh 2008-08-13 08:31:45 .... Very well expressed, Brian. I think I get what you're trying to put forward here. I think it's quite hartfelt and perhaps would have a greater meaning to you than it might be to a reader. I really liked this part: So I steal another rhythm, I steal another line, Nothing I write, can I truly call Mine, So I rob my heroes again, I steal from the stars, To try and dance, if at least for one night, with their muse Good one. Keep them comin! + Report this comment
Posted by allmine 2008-08-13 08:32:57 .... It isn't bad at all...I can see how it might fit good into a song. Isn't it amazing the rhyme and rhythm that you see when you write escapes others completely. As for the content of the story...I don't think that there is an original story idea out there anymore. Just re-written ones... + Report this comment
Posted by Brian W Callaghan 2008-08-13 08:41:18 .... Exactly, allmine. You get it. The title is due to the fact that we all borrow elements of style and symbolism from our influences. There is not an original thought left in the world. All you can hope is that you are ripping off someone that few people have heard of. I am of course, not condoning all out plagiarism. Just recognizing the influence of others on my work. That is theme 1. The other was a lot of self doubt and reflection on my flaws. Thanks. + Report this comment
Posted by June Eclipsis 2008-08-13 08:48:52 ... Yes, originality is getting quite rare. I believe it's because we come into contact with one another too often and that the media is affecting us too much. If you want something original, listen to someone who has lived an isolated lifestyle, like a hermit or something like that. I wonder what that would be like... And yet it is so strange that we actually enjoy listening and reading the same type of stuff over and over again. Humans are surely strange an intriguing beings. + Report this comment
Posted by chaabuk 2008-08-13 12:55:17 Copycat Oh God! When I read the title, I was thinking of something else. It was so stupid of me. Never mind. Still borrowing is not plagiarising. Get to know the definition of plagiarism. But the nuances are done well. + Report this comment
Posted by Zombie Punk 2008-08-13 15:38:44 Plagiarism i liked it but i think you need to work on the punctuation here + Report this comment
Posted by Tarhead Mugwump 2008-08-13 18:47:24 i've gotta say two things... one - is that i definately like the content of the poem/song. two - with a lack of periods, it reads as one long sentence - i would have liked to see a couple of those. three - i don't, definitely do not agree that originality is/can/or will go down the drain.. and four - i can't count very well. write on brian! + Report this comment
Posted by Eternal_Bliss440 2008-08-14 18:11:23 I really liked this I can really relate to this becuase sometimes we don't have anything to write about and it is so easy to copy and paste. I write lyrics too so I don't mind + Report this comment
Posted by Something Indecent 2008-08-17 00:17:33 .... I totally knew this was a song after a couple of lines. Or atleast a song like poem. I agree with the originality idea but like Southpark said Who cares if all the good ideas have been taken? I'm interested in hearing the song. Good piece. + Report this comment

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