Posted by philneale1952
2008-08-13 05:20:16
Religion?
 
Whilst I understand the need for free expression in writing, I am curious as to the choice of a website like this to use as a pulpit.
Maybe it's just me, being an agnostic, but it seems out of place.
Phil
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Posted by June Eclipsis
2008-08-13 08:44:34
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While this was well written, be careful of what subject matter you use to put your point forward. Religion is a very sensitive subject and when placing your main focus onto it, it may be difficult to communicate to those who are not of your faith.
When writing poetry for this website, try searching for something we can all relate to as human beings. That way, it would be much easier to be able to communicate.
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Posted by allmine
2008-08-13 08:51:01
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As trua as the above statements are...we are here to critisize the writing, right? And I am definitely the least religious person you will ever find besides an atheist. It is hard for us here to critisize the flow of a song becuase we know not what melody you are following. If your belief in God is that strong, follow it, but I would recommend you not preach to us about it...
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Posted by shagufta
2008-08-13 09:23:50
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I do have my own religious beliefs and I follow them for I belief in that Super Force but I do respect your belief too. I believe, co existence alone can better the religious and spiritual world. Write more if you feel comfortable in this aspect of poetry. There is place for everyone and everything in this world.
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Posted by chaabuk
2008-08-13 12:47:41
Difference
I like it. I like it immensely. When a song is written in praise of Lord, it reaches my heart. And the true essence of sacrifice comes out. No one human can gauge the depth of Christ's sacrifice. No one.
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Posted by chaabuk
2008-08-13 12:49:20
Sublime
Although, I have friends of all denominations, still I enjoy the songs os reverance here. Even an atheist will check his step and become a confirmed believer once he takes this to heart. Keep writing.
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Posted by Tarhead Mugwump
2008-08-13 19:02:22
odd reactions
as this is a place for free expressions, i am pleased to see that you have chosen to express yourself in this fashion.
that which pleases us to write should be written, it is for the reader to decide to read or not.
as i have personal knowledge of child molestation, and abuse of women - i cannot read a story or sit through a movie that includes either of the two - it is a personal choice.
odd how many people can kill, rape, plunder, and pillage in their stories and it is okay - yet you write something based on pure joy and satisfaction and it is not received in the same light.
kudos to you - you win the i've got nerve award for the month.
write on!
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Posted by resistanceisfreedom
2008-08-13 21:07:36
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i just didn't really care for this..i just couldn't take it seriously because to me, it sounded like some bible school song. and i didn't really like some of the lines....they were cheesy in my opinion.
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Posted by Eternal_Bliss440
2008-08-16 20:33:20
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I like how you used it in thelyric form but I think you shoul be careful about what you write because you can turn someone off . I'm not saying that you cannot express your religious bleifes. I think itsa great. I'm not so sure how some people are going to take it though. Just be careful. I like the lyrics. I think it could be a great song. Great piece thoguh
hannah
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