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Primal Need, Chapter 1

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Panhandling Scum


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Written by Max Booth III   
Tuesday, 12 August 2008
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Repulsive bum
Is what they say
When they see me
On the street
With my bottle
Of rum,
They point and
Call me
Panhandling scum,

I ignore their threats
Of kicking my ass
And the flicking of
The cigarettes,
All from the waste
Of middle-class,

I’m sick of
The trash can
Behind the McDonald’s
It smells like piss,
Sometimes I wonder
If it matters that
I even exist,

I hate this world,
People say
Someday things
Will turn
For the better
With a key
For this metal
Fetter
And peace on
Earth will not
Be a myth
But a reality,
No more
Will I have
To cry and
Writhe,

But it is really
Hard to see,
Seems kind
Of silly
To me
As I lay
In the alley way
Watching this
World descending 
Deeper everyday,

Gangs of red
And cults of white
Painting the globe
Where they have bled,
Violence was their seed
And the tree was their greed,
It all tumbles down along
The pistol stampede,

Selfish hypocrites,
Greedy politics
And liars
Slowly raping and
Setting this world
On fire
Sparked by their
Megalomania
Of peace insomnia,

Don’t succumb
To their dirty ways,
Don’t become
A part of their phase,
Don’t kill from
The same ole clichés,
Don’t be dumb,
Be different, it’ll amaze,
But don’t listen to me,

I’m just panhandling scum.



Copyright 2008 Max Booth III
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Comments (13)
Posted by philneale1952
2008-08-13 05:35:22
Stark

You don't mess about do you Max?

Right to the point straight away. This was not a rant like the one I just read.

I suspect there was a similar political message behind it though.

Your poetry's definitley getting better - or maybe it's me that's tuning in more (God but that's scary).

Good piece.

Phil
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Posted by Ashutosh
2008-08-13 05:42:46
Grr88

You're becoming better and better at the verse, Max. After the 12 Step madness, I think this is the best one you've churned out.

It's poetic, sharp, and to the point. Most of all, it's not cheap verse. It's quite a serious piece and at the same time, has it's own humor.
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Posted by June Eclipsis
2008-08-13 08:37:14
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It was very straight forward, which I actually like. It's actually pretty hard to pull off writing straightforward, but you did a very nice job.
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Posted by Ashutosh
2008-08-13 08:41:12
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And the picture just adds more emphasis to it.
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Posted by allmine
2008-08-13 09:09:13
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The words were harsh and good and straight to the point. I agree that your poetic skills are coming along. HOWEVER, I think you need to work on this one a little bit. I feel that the lines are somewhat choppy. I think you coould combine some of them so that the flow flows...my opinion, you don't have to take it
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Posted by Something Indecent
2008-08-14 21:00:41
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I think my favorite line was 'all from the waste of middle-class'

Very good social commentary. I can totally see the last stanza being used in a punk song. Just from the format of it. So when are you starting a band dude?
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Posted by lemon
2008-08-16 12:21:21
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This was really good Max. The rhythm was unusual, but it flowed really well. Unique piece. I liked the reference to the mcdonalds trash can that smelled like piss haha. Classic
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Posted by Dirkin
2008-08-16 20:09:15
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You tell a good story with this poem, almost makes me want to be homeless! It goes to show that everyone you see, even homeless people can have deep thoughts of their own
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Posted by Terry Collett
2008-08-28 14:05:06
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I thought i had read this poem and made a comment, but maybe i just dreamed about doing so. Anyway, I have read it and loved the engaging theme and structure of the poem. Maybe that is what i wrote in the dream. Very good.
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Posted by harmattan
2008-09-01 08:48:16
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Max.

Just caught up with this one, and glad I did.

Philosophical "scum" is a rarity, but you get away with it

by the twists of reasoning.

It works for me.

I definately would not flick my cigarette butt.....

but I wouldn't flick a coin either to be honest.

Meaningful poem

Kind regards

Harmattan
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Posted by Pilgrim
2008-09-05 17:31:20
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I liked this poem.

I've experienced homelessness on numerous occasions. I never went about asking for money, but I did study the looks of aversion on people's faces. It was sickening to say the least. You are treated like you have leprosy.

Good job.
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Posted by b.k.
2008-09-21 14:18:44
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terrible how humanity seems to die out more and more each day. condescending assholes stare down their noses at everyone and anyone who don't live up to their standards. great job portraying this.
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Posted by scooby
2008-10-08 16:20:59
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again another great poem full of emotion. well done, Max.
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