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Your Big Day

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Written by zenith

Friday, 08 August 2008

I don't think you need me, I never felt needed in a second with you, Let me know if you miss me, How come???and you let me go!! Happy birthday without me, You're finally free, Have a ******* birthday, Gather all the once you love, I know I'm not in the list, But the only god above, Have given me what's best, So happy birthday, I'm so far a way, I'm not gonna mess up your moment, Your 2nd of August, Just let me know if you missed me, Even if you did, Your pride will get on the way. I wanna know... How is it like without me?!!! Are you having a happy birthday???? Copyright 2008 zenith Keyword: Big Day Report this story | Add to Favorites | Send to Friends | Author's Profile No Comments posted Comments (7) Posted by Squall1 2008-08-09 00:13:41 .... A very interesting poem. I personally think that the birthday boy or girl has hurt the speaker in a way. I think that there is a good chance that they were dating. Unfortunately, there were a lot of grammatical errors in the poem. + Report this comment Posted by jtalos 2008-08-09 00:33:34 .... This ought to be a poem. In fact it ought to be a very bad poem. + Report this comment Posted by chaabuk 2008-08-09 01:25:50 WOW! I can feel the anguish you must be going through parting with such a heartless girl. And still you can go ahead wishing her a happy birthday! She doesn't know what she is missing. I can only sympathise with you. Find someone better. Even with typos, your pain is apparent. You deserve the highest honor for writing such beautiful verse. + Report this comment Posted by chaabuk 2008-08-10 03:53:37 Amazing You have done an amazing job with the storyline. Just goes on to show, you will shine in pain too. And get great reviews too. I particularly liked my own comment. I am patting my back. YO! + Report this comment Posted by colemoriss 2008-08-10 18:33:39 .... wow. awkward, my birthday is the second of august. now im realy scared. no, im kidding, it was a good poem, i enjoyed it alot. good job... tell whoever your mad at happy late birthday for me. + Report this comment Posted by June Eclipsis 2008-08-11 08:38:37 ... It really feels like you meant it. Loved it, really. But maybe you should change "once" to "ones". Other than that, I really liked it. + Report this comment Posted by shagufta 2008-08-13 09:28:46 .... Its sad on one level and pathetic on the other. Why is it that at times there is cross connection or love travels in two parallel lines. Hope you find true love and live happily ever after. + Report this comment Post a comment Post a comment

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