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Written by Max Booth III   
Friday, 08 August 2008
My Secret Spot


    My Secret Spot was in the kitchen. The kitchen was about the length and width of an average hallway. It was quite small and very uncomfortable with more than one person present. The walls, ceiling, and floor were all the same decorative coffee and oil stained yellow tribal-like design tile and wallpaper. To me, it is impossible to describe. I never knew how to. It was something I could never exactly figure out. To be more specific on my Secret Spot it was between the stove and refrigerator. It was such a small space that only I could fit in. It was every claustrophobic’s worst nightmare.

    Red-eyed mice used to visit me in my Secret Spot. I wasn’t afraid, even at the young age of eight. They were my Secret Friends. Just my Secret Friends keeping me company in my Secret Spot. I loved them dearly. I even named them, although right now I can’t for the life of me remember their names. I think it had something to do with the Power Rangers, but I could be wrong. There was really no way to tell them apart, but my childhood mind thought that it could.

    Besides the Secret Ants, Mice, and Rolly Pollies there was another frequent visitor at my Secret Spot. Her name was Penny, and she was my dog. A small white mongrel. No one was sure what breeds she was, but there were obvious signs of the Chihuahua. She was a small one, she was. That was why we were both able to fit in my Secret Spot. I’d curl her on my lap and pet her fur. It sure was nice back between the stove and fridge. Even the cobwebs were a sign of safety.
   
    My Penny, well, what is there to say about her?  She was magnificent. She loved ice cream. Every time she was in the car and we went past Dairy Queen she would go nuts and start barking up a storm. Most of the time she got her way and we ordered her one of those delicious doggie cups that she grew so fond of. But let me tell you something, ice cream is as strong as coffee for little dogs. Penny would bounce off the walls after her Dairy Queen treats. Those were her favorite.

    Another thing Penny liked to do was every morning when my Dad got ready for work she would try and sneak in the back of the car, so she could go with him to the mill. The closest she every got was to the next street. Boy, was my Dad pissed!  I think he was just mad because she scared him, though. That always made me laugh.

    You know how the kids now days all want to be black?  Well, Penny was like that, too. Every time one of us would give her a bath she would dash out of the bathroom and out of the house, leaping like a galloping horse off of the stoned three step constructed porch. Then she would run towards our next door neighbor’s flooded garden and roll around as if she was making a snow angel. The results were a white dog transformed into a completely black one. Yeah, she wanted to be gangster. Another thing, Penny was extremely fast for such an old dog. Faster than most track dogs. You couldn’t catch her if you tried.

    But sometimes no matter how fast you are, you’re not fast enough.

    My Mom told my older brother, Jeremy, to go check the mail on that miserable winter morning. Jeremy and I were playing around; hide and go seek to be more exact. He told me to go hide and then he’d find me when he got back. Knowing the perfect, un-findable spot to hide, I excitedly snuck in the kitchen and crawled into my Secret Spot.

    Trying to hold back laughter so nobody would hear me; I waited for Jeremy’s return. I must have sat bunched up in there for ten full minutes until I heard the cringing, ominous creaking of the front door being swung open. I was confused at what I was hearing. “Oh no, Mom!  I’m sorry!  I couldn’t help it, I couldn’t stop her!”  It sounded like my brother was about to cry.

    I squeezed my way out of my Secret Spot and made my way out to the living room. Placed on the coffee table was my dog. My Penny. Her eyes were open. Her eyes were staring. Staring off into an unknown world. No, her eyes were staring at me. Looking at me.

    Her spirit was alive, but her heart was not. Her mouth lay open and her long orange stained tongue hung out. The reason her tongue was orange was because about an hour earlier I had spilt a bag of Cheddar Cheese Popcorn on the carpet floor, and Penny was my vacuum cleaner.

    There was a deep gash spread across her cheek. I could see the blood inside, but none of it was leaking out. Her eyes were looking at me. Dirty snow and sleet were splashed all upon her lifeless body. A bone in her skinny left hind leg was poking out at the knee cap. It was whiter than the brightest set of teeth. Why was the bone so clean?  It must have been some sort of sick joke. “Liar!” I yelled at my brother. “You’re a liar!  This is fake!  She isn’t dead!  You’re a ******* liar!”  I forgot that my Mom was standing right next to me, but she seemed to let this profanity slide. I didn’t even notice at the time that I had cursed in the first place. My brother was a liar and her eyes were looking at me. I continued calling him a liar until tears were practically drowning my face. “Liar!  Liar--why is she looking at me!?  Make her stop!  Please make her stop!  She isn’t really dead, you’re a liar!”

    Penny was looking at me.

    I couldn’t take anymore. I ran into the kitchen and slid into my Secret Spot like a baseball player sliding into home. I buried my face in my hands and cried for what seemed like an aching eternity. My Penny was dead. She wasn’t faking, she was dead.

    I found out later that when Jeremy opened the door to go to the mail box Penny had slipped out with him and dashed toward the icy street. The same street a snow plow truck working for the city just happened to be on at the time.

    The snow plow never stopped, never slowed down.

    About a month later when my parents knew that I was not going to get over this lost easily or anytime soon, they brought home another dog. A puppy. It was a cute little bulldog. His eyes were all alien colored, but I liked that. His face was scrunched up as if he was sucking on a lemon. I instantly fell in love with my new pup. I decided to call him Lucky.
   
    But he wasn’t Penny. Penny was my dog, this bulldog was not. So that was why I reached over and snapped Lucky’s neck.

    Now that I sit here and write this, I think about dear o’ Penny. She was my dog. She was the greatest. I still miss her.
   
    My Secret Spot is no longer there. There isn’t anyway I’d be able to fit in it now anyways. That was the place for an eight year old. That was a place for comfort, for safety. My Secret Spot has vanished.

    The stove, the refrigerator … all gone.

    The memories … still here.



Copyright 2008 Max Booth III
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Comments (13)
Posted by ams
2008-08-08 20:34:29
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this was a great story. i loved the part about Penny trying to be a gangster, that made me laugh. the ending was very sad, but death is a part of growing up and losing childhood innocence. i think that childhood was captured wonderfully here.
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Posted by garyowen
2008-08-08 20:44:36
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My secret spot is gone. I enjoyed this story. It took me back aways. I thought you aticulated your story perfectly and honestly. I agree with the prvious and think that penny's fantasy was a great toutch.

Take care and enjoy. you have anatural talent for writing.
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Posted by Tarhead Mugwump
2008-08-08 22:47:19
excellent

this story, i believe, has got to be one of the best you have ever churned out max. very stirring. i'd say i'm surprised, but i'm not.

keep up the great work.

write on!
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Posted by lemon
2008-08-09 00:18:02
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nice job. you made me almost feel sad.. until you snapped lucky's neck! you're mean! :P

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you did a great job with the whole 'secret spot' thing. I liked this story very much even though it was very weird. =]
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Posted by The 13th
2008-08-09 07:34:42
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The beginning kinda reminded me of "The butcher boy".You'd like that Max, it's a good story and the film is not too bad either.

A really good story and Tarhead could be right, this maybe one of your best.Could see parts of myself in it as a kid and yeah I had a secret spot.

Loved the emotion between the kid and the dog.Good on ya.
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Posted by Something Indecent
2008-08-09 21:55:41
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The emotion was articulated very well in this. I like how the kid got twisted after losing it's dog. It seemed to set up for some kind of deranged character who grows up and commits unspeakable acts. Very nice formating with the dog staring. I think you wrote that just right. By the way, is your character a boy or a girl? Perhaps both? Maybe neither. Maybe it's the anti-christ. Yeah, lets go with that.
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Posted by allmine
2008-08-14 10:36:34
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I understand how he (or you) feels about Lucky. I felt that way about my dog. I was never lucky enough to have a secret spot, but you shared your emotions of one very good...
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Posted by Ashutosh
2008-08-14 11:09:20
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Booth, you exhibit great talent. This piece here shows your versatility. Even the language seems different from your usual writings.

Apart from the good things, I was trying to find sumthin bad, but it was difficult. This is quite a nice piece of writing.

I found this typo:

"The closest she every got was to the next street. "

and there are some more which u can spot on ur own. For instance: "...parents knew that I was not going to get over this lost easily or anytime soon."

Apart from that, language needs to be a little polished, though without compromising on the style. The style can be rough, but the language needs to be correct. Shouldn't be awkward at any point. Plus the punctuation thing needs to be worked on.

And this transition:

I instantly fell in love with my new pup. I decided to call him Lucky.

But he wasn’t Penny. Penny was my dog, this bulldog was not. So that was why I reached over and snapped Lucky’s neck.

It doesn't make any sense to me.
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Posted by Ashutosh
2008-08-14 11:13:11
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That transition seems illogical to me. The ending is kind of weak.

But overall, this is a good work. I gave it 5 stars because of the feeling it exhibited and because you did something different here.
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Posted by philneale1952
2008-08-15 07:42:55
Memories

Our first cat, Timmy, died in similar circumstances and you relived the memories for me. He was mine.

I thought you took a little of the shine away by 'killing' the pup, but this was overall a very good piece of work.

Don't know why I missed this one before.......

Phil
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Posted by flowerclover
2008-08-15 12:13:35
BRILLANT

Brillant! I loved it!
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Posted by scooby
2008-10-10 14:12:38
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Great story Max. you are just getting better and better.
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Posted by Ruby Whispers
2008-11-01 20:52:31
Wow.

You captured so many feelings in this. I too was a bit thrown by snapping Lucky's neck. Couldn't you just have bannished him from your secret spot? No, wait. That's something I WOULD DO. Sigh. Your stories always leave me thinking, shaken and thoroughly entertained.

J
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