Posted by chaabuk
2008-08-08 08:29:19
Merry go round
I haven't played roulette but I've read of it as much as I am reading this mesmerising poem of yours. I concur with the first para of the poem. And the remaining I'd want your opinion. Deep analysis of life, I guess. Keep it up.
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Posted by chaabuk
2008-08-08 08:36:17
Bang Bang
Jag. I hope you are not going to point the loaded gun at your own self. And you do not know where that fatal bullet lies. And you press the trigger. And...Oh! me God!
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Posted by allmine
2008-08-08 12:09:55
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Good rhythm and good flow. This could relate to a lot of things and not just the pull of a trigger...even though that is what the traditional meaning is. Didn't I just read somewhere else about the throw of the dice?
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Posted by Tarhead Mugwump
2008-08-08 12:23:01
couldn't
imagine myself in a position in life where roulette would be an option, and it's interesting to read something on the subject.
how bad could life be if you are willing to risk losing and having to live it...
write on!
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Posted by Zombie Punk
2008-08-08 12:35:14
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For some reason I thought this was about a 'taboo' subject, but that's my dirty mind taking effect I guess lol.
This was pretty damn good. Short and to the point. Great work, man. I liked every line.
I enjoyed the whole Poem.
Keep On Writing!
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Posted by lemon
2008-08-08 12:37:22
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This was interesting. I'll agree with everyone else's comments, it was a good read and it had a good flow. I liked how you put the parenthases around (but which one I do not know) nice job
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Posted by r.e.potter
2008-08-09 06:49:19
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Thats such a cool deadly game of chance. If someone offered you a million dollars to put the gun to your head with a 1 and 6 chance...would you chance it... damn, that would make a cool story.
liked it
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Posted by The 13th
2008-08-09 07:58:11
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This reminded me of the Deer Hunter.
Liked the poem, such darkness, well I thought.Great job.
But Russ i wouldn't do that for a million but I'm certain my girlfriend would put me up to do it.lol
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Posted by harmattan
2008-08-12 03:43:43
Russian roulette
An aspect of war. Two generals face off and one says
"So how many men can YOU waste today?
Because however many you mention I will plus ten!"
If the generals sorted out their differences in this one-to-one way there would be a lot less conflict in the world.
And that is the point. It is ten times more terryfying when it is one-to-one.
And you have clicked on that.
Good pace, good length, nice rhythm, and chilling.
Well done.
Kinf regards
Harmattan
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Posted by harmattan
2008-08-12 03:46:26
RR
sorry, here is the score.
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