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A Place Called Love
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Written by Michelle Portz   
Thursday, 07 August 2008
Ridiculous amounts of happiness flow from my heart and cover the Earth that I walk on
Everything in its right place
I become overly certain of the energy between us
But sooner than I anticipate, my soul hardens and a crack is formed
This split continues and stretches itself nearly the entire length of my being
The pain in my heart cannot remember the joy it once felt
I know not my fate or the future of my emotions
Will I recover?
Or will I bruise and scar over the division of my reality?
Hurt and frustrated, I am enveloped in Love
A simple embrace and a silent expression cure the worst of my feelings
I am in Love.
Deep and real.
And I know I will stay in this place called Love as long as you will have me.

Copyright 2008 Michelle Portz
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Posted by lemon
2008-08-07 21:49:53
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Good stream of conscience piece. I like the way you described the crack between the narrator and his/her lover and also the bruising and scarring analogy. Nice job =]
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Posted by philneale1952
2008-08-08 07:58:40
Sorry

Sounds like you need a cuddle.

Can't oblige, just off home and probably on the other side of the "Pond".

Nice flowing piece.

Phil
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Posted by Tarhead Mugwump
2008-08-08 11:04:15
sorry

i have a limited imagination regarding poetry - and am somewhat challenged in that area...

it appears as a person in love - then sabotaged by their own thoughts - then reassured by the one they love?

help!

regardless of my helplessness in this genre, the writing was very well done and the format made it an easy read.

write on!
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Posted by Michelle Portz
2008-08-08 19:29:38
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I understand that it may not have been so clear, it was definitely written off the top of my head and with little re-writing. I was trying to describe what it is like to be in love because the ones we love most hurt us sometimes, and even then they are the only ones who can make us feel better...thanks for the comments!
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