Posted by chaabuk
2008-08-06 04:44:51
Mushy
This reads a very together-together work. Love can do msny things- it can give you a high without drinking too. You have brought out this lovely aspect with all its intensity. Enjoyed it.
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Posted by onyxdragon
2008-08-06 10:57:20
Nicely done
The flow is what made it work for me. It had a great flow. Well, that and the wording was really nice. I especially liked "dreamy afterthoughts" and "darkening vagueness."
And I must say, it's always hard requesting/finding something that once was and now is not. That "favored past." It's always so hard to return to something when events have taken those involved in many directions and far from the original path. A sincere request, indeed, but a hard one to manage. I find it takes two. Excellent work, Anna.
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Posted by Zombie Punk
2008-08-06 13:57:27
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Excellent work. Loved it.
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Posted by Brian W Callaghan
2008-08-06 14:29:18
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The wording flowed well. love and wine are common images, the intoxicating effect of love and all. It is nice to see someone write a positive love poem. I myself have trouble writing this type of thing. I like that it is a call to reclaim the joy of the early days in a relationship.
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Posted by Terry Collett
2008-08-08 11:20:18
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If were blind(God forbid)yours would be amongst the poems I'd love to be read to me day in day out. There is such merit in these lines that I am going to say: I LOVE THEM.
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Posted by Tarhead Mugwump
2008-08-08 11:47:19
anyone
given the time, could turn water into wine. turning wine into water is a real trick.
maybe it's subliminal, but when i read the flow of this poem, i feel the water lapping on the shore.
thank you.
write on!
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Posted by Something Indecent
2008-08-09 23:11:01
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The color really goes well with the picture. I really liked the last stanza. The seemed bitter-sweet but with more sweet than bitter. A lovely poem anna. I tip my invisible hat to you.
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Posted by harmattan
2008-08-10 06:01:41
Traces
Better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all.....
But it is one of the easiest things in the world to do. I have done it a thousand times.
Fall in love. Even easier than giving up smoking, which I have also done a thousand times.
The difficulty is in sustaining it.
I guess this poem is a one-sided plea to re-spark or re-consider a love that it fading.
An excellently crafted piece of work.
ONE BEEF;
It did not need the mauve text. I have cateracts. You made it very difficult to read. Sorry, that is personal, but important to me.
Kind regards
Harmattan
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Posted by d.dasgupta
2008-08-11 02:57:32
Excellent
Rediscovery of what's lost in the mists of time. Rediscovery, not with the help of wine, but with the help of the moon. Are there lasting impressions? Of falling in love? Of the room inside the hearts? Moon's the only witness in the darkening vagueness, along granular paths!
Soft, beautiful, yet no nonsense!!
Excellent.
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Posted by CliffMitchell
2008-08-21 07:18:35
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gorgeous anna! why you write is why i, too. the romanticism in this poem seems brushed by baudelaire, just a touch but it's there. i love your voice of word so smooth.
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Posted by Ashutosh
2008-09-30 12:07:28
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Well, what to say, I have no words to do justice to the beauty of poem. I'd give it a try though.
Pretty Good. One of the most poetic and beautifully woven web of words that I've read in recent times.
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