Posted by chaabuk
2008-08-04 11:46:35
Despair
The feeling of clautrophobia is very apparent. There is despair, dejection and disappointment. Why should it be in such a young life facing a near birthday. Sad.
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Posted by Hodders
2008-08-04 11:49:01
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I wanted to write a poem about a teenager getting older, there comes a point when everyone must become independent and the pressures that come with it can be pretty claustrophobic and scary.
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Posted by chaabuk
2008-08-04 12:05:14
Bleak future
I must say, in the light of your comment above, this is the commentary on the current scenario. The youth are not finding a positive outlet and guidance. They are the future of any nation but their future is bleak.
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Posted by lemon
2008-08-04 14:20:36
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This is a good description of the transition between child and adult. Don't listen to those who say there is no future for today's youth. I happen to believe that THEY will be the ones who evoke the best changes to come. =]
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Posted by colemoriss
2008-08-04 19:47:58
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i liked this, i got the theme of clastophobia here, but i sensed more, the feeling of getting older wether it being elderly or becoming an adult or parent.
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Posted by Tarhead Mugwump
2008-08-04 20:27:12
scary
stuff - that growing up thing is. it is so easy to be controlled and complain - and yet another thing completely to be in control and the only one to blame.
well done, write on!
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Posted by The 13th
2008-08-05 16:14:40
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I'm really gettin into your Poetry Hodders. I liked it,
Adulthood is'nt that bad- mortgage, bills, working for crap money and your kids turning your hair grey.
God, im depressed now-lol
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Posted by Amatayo
2008-08-06 22:34:43
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the poem made me think.
congrats on making a fool look into himself.
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Posted by Ashutosh
2008-09-29 12:13:31
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Very well done. This is the best poem on this theme that I've read. No hanky panky stuff. This was pretty good. Great structure and meaning maintained throughout.
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