Posted by Zombie Punk
2008-08-03 23:53:23
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I think you captured the scenerio of the beach perfectly. It reminded me of Daytona, now I wanna go back and do some more boogie boarding. I thought this was a really cool poem. But for some reason the first stanza didn't seem right, but after a couple of rereads it seemed perfect. Weird ...
Great Job!
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Posted by aveatquevale
2008-08-03 23:57:43
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I love how each word flows nicely into the next. Your strong use of imagery helped evoke a nice tranquil feeling as I was reading. Really enjoyed the read.
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Posted by garyowen
2008-08-04 02:34:10
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I liked this a lot the imagery evoked was perfect. when you can smell it, taste it, hear and feel it, then it's perfect.
write on.
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Posted by Hodders
2008-08-04 11:00:52
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I loved it! Great descriptions, I knew exactly what you were talking about with the feelings of stress disappearing, the roar of the surf, the salty air etc. I've added it to my favourites already! It makes a difference to poems about death, murder and suicide. You can clearly picture the seaside in your head when reading the poem. Superb!
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Posted by Tarhead Mugwump
2008-08-04 20:15:33
just
moved up from the texas coastline to the hill country. spent nine years watching the sun rise sitting on the beach. most beautiful thing i've ever seen.
your poem did a wonderful job or drawing up the memories, well done!
write on!
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Posted by Terry Collett
2008-08-06 02:32:29
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Fine poem which I find captivating by the images and colours it brings to mind.
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Posted by Brian W Callaghan
2008-08-06 12:06:01
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This made me think of Assateague Island, one of my favorite places to camp and relax by the sea. Excellent work and use of the word permeate.
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Posted by harmattan
2008-08-06 17:48:03
beach
you aint seen a beach till you've seen a yorkshire beach...
Brought images of childhood back to me, but why the desperate depressive last couple of lines
You must learn to enjoy things for what they are, not just for the interlude they give you between miseries.
You might find that misery is little small minute interludes that can occur between good times
A yorkshire man's cup is always half full...
never half empty.
The rest of the world can only watch and learn..
Kind regards
harmattan
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Posted by harmattan
2008-08-06 17:50:38
sorry
scores on the doors......
I forgot.
(I am new here)
And I've got to stop saying that.....
H
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Posted by Amatayo
2008-08-06 22:25:36
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this poem was not for me but it was well written.
but thats just my opinion.
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Posted by d.dasgupta
2008-08-18 01:28:58
Picture
A beautiful picture drawn with words. You took the reader through all the experiences you described as though they wer happening to him. Or, may be, one saw you so clearly as yo were 'walking the shore'.
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Posted by Ashutosh
2008-08-19 10:35:49
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This was nice. Beautifully expressed in short.
As DD said, the picture drawn is clear and vivid. Nice simple poem, successfuly manages to convey the thought.
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Posted by Helpless
2008-08-21 07:01:41
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What a great poem. I love the beach and there is nothing like the solace of walking alone the beach alone. It is so peaceful and it is such a great reflective time. This captures it perfectly.
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Posted by Dirkin
2008-08-22 00:22:12
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I think that standing on the ocean and listening to the waves speaks to the same spot in each of us, of universal peace. Simple and beautiful message in this poem
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Posted by r.e.potter
2008-10-11 12:58:57
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How did I miss this gem. I simply love the last two lines about how the oceans shore can help forget about ones stresses while walking the shore. This was a very relaxing poem if that makes any sense.
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