Posted by chaabuk
2008-08-03 04:42:53
Today's world
This is a burning statement on the current state of the world. It is so rampant everywhere. Man has become hopeless and defeated. He has failed himself. I am so glad to have read it.
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Posted by harmattan
2008-08-03 06:09:32
stagnation, castration, procrastination
Am I out of touch.
If it is as bad as you say, and I have no reason to doubt you, you are nearer to it than I,
then I am glad I am where I am.
But I am not sure whether you pine for better days past or merely wallow in pitiable acceptance.
Are there really no alternatives?
Phew it must be worse than I thought....
Nice one, but disturbing. I think I prefer you when you recall puberty.
But don't stop on my account.
Kind regards
Harmattan
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Posted by Zombie Punk
2008-08-03 09:04:33
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CAN YOU HEAR ME, CASTRATION!?? ROCK N' ROLL!
ouch
anyways
This was a pretty sweet Poem
Good Stuff you have here.
Now, if you will excuse me, Van Wilder just came on
adios
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Posted by Squall1
2008-08-03 11:28:53
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I like it a lot. You did a good job in simplifying judgment and false assumptions into intelligent ideas.
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Posted by lemon
2008-08-03 13:24:58
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Dude. You are writing poetry. what happened?
Actually this is really good. I liked it even though nobody got poked in the eye.
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P.S. trust me, you dont want anymore instant noodles.
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Posted by Hodders
2008-08-04 11:13:26
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I thought it was a very well written poem but a little too boring for my liking. Other than that, great job and I look forward to reading some more of your stuff!
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Posted by Amatayo
2008-08-06 22:22:32
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I really liked this poem and I really liked how it was not an especially long one.
congrats
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Posted by Ashutosh
2008-08-29 07:31:28
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Hmm..what was this about?
Pretty good rhyme though.
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Posted by Pilgrim
2008-09-04 14:09:32
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This was okay.
Would "hostility" sound better instead of "hostile"?
And "unfairly" instead of "unfair"?
Anywhow, good job.
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