Posted by Zombie Punk
2008-08-01 16:00:33
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Wow, this was cool.
But I'm dissapointed that it's over already.
Maybe you can write a story for this, you know?
I bet it would be a pretty awesome post-apocalyptic type of tale.
Good Luck and Keep Writing!
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Posted by Tarhead Mugwump
2008-08-01 20:49:14
enjoyed it
the only thing i found that made me twitch was that it all kinda ran together - no space to breath, i think. but, really, i have never had a talent for reading poetry...
write on!
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Posted by r.e.potter
2008-08-01 20:57:59
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This must be a zombie thinga-ma-jig. Don't see the relation to the poem in the title though. Be honest with ya...Zombie's scare me off...stories and poems that is...just not a big fan of that sort of thing. But your poem was well delivered with a sense of eeriness to it. Good job with that.
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Posted by r.e.potter
2008-08-01 20:59:21
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ok,,I feel stupid...maybe I should read the keywords next time.
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Posted by Sweetman
2008-08-04 18:10:47
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i get the feeling this guy is a night time stalker or murderer and is plagued by his guilt by day but totally withdrawn at night. meybe not im not good at poetry reading either. i liked it though
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Posted by harmattan
2008-08-07 13:02:21
Bits
Excellent title.
The vampire, or werewolf jumped straight out of the first couple of lines and savaged me.
And I loved it.
Less obscure than some peoms on these pages, and all the better for it.
If I want puzzles and enigmas I I put "puzzles and enigmas" on google and choose my own level of difficulty.
It is heartwarming sometimes to see where a writer came from and where he is going without having to think too deeply about it.
You warmed my heart with this.
(then ripped it out and devoured it I suppose.......)
Don't stop
Kind regards
Harmattan
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Posted by chaabuk
2008-08-10 12:45:16
Imagery
This reads like surreal stuff. Lot of imagery and good imagination put to work. Who is a werewolf - a vampire! Is this darkness at noon. Pretty damn dark!
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