Posted by chaabuk 2008-07-31 15:56:53 Beauty
     Love was never so beautifully expressed, where grief was dripping in the begging, a hopeful and happy ending paves way for love. I had read "my love is like a red red rose" but here the black rose has intensity. Beautiful. + Report this comment |  |
Posted by lemon 2008-07-31 17:40:17 ....
     usually the longer poems tend to lose rhythm as it goes, but this one did not. I'll lose interest sometimes too, but this kept my attention the whole time. It was beautifully written =] + Report this comment |  |
Posted by Tarhead Mugwump 2008-07-31 20:54:28 i got
     attached to the words:
tiny tornados of absence.
really enjoyed reading this one - i am also generally poem length challenged, but between the font and the words i rolled to the end.
write on! + Report this comment |  |
Posted by Terry Collett 2008-08-01 13:52:51 ....
I am back after a short break. Forgot how good the poetry can be here. This is good; enjoyed. + Report this comment |  |
Posted by Hodders 2008-08-01 15:34:50 ....
     Brilliant! Probably one of the best poems I've read on here in all honesty. I loved it! Very deep and meaningful, well written, it seemed very personal. definitely one for my favourites I think! Brilliant job! Well done! + Report this comment |  |
Posted by resistanceisfreedom 2008-08-01 16:04:49 ....
     and i believe this is one of the most beautiful things i have ever read. seriously, your talent is huge and you write amazing poetry. + Report this comment |  |
Posted by Sad Sara 2008-08-01 22:36:38 Whew!
     Damn August...
Wow!
What an amazing verse, so beautiful and I loved the length and thought yer put into this one here.
I fear the air
Between us. -That such fab line, I love it.
You are unknown to me.
Within me,
The walls broke like cold glass in heat.
I can't hear from you yet,
Far away in
Needless loneliness.-Oh yes, I love needless loneliness, it sound so damn Poetically cool.
Aye, well done me girl, this was fantastic.
Keep well,
'Anna + Report this comment |  |
Posted by Vintage prose 2008-08-02 00:28:31 ....
     This was a great poem, beautifully expressed, and visually stimulating.
I especially relished the lines...
Maple leaves
Dance in tiny
Tornados of absence. + Report this comment |  |
Posted by jagblane 2008-08-17 16:25:16 ....
     Great pictures but unfortunalty to long. Maybe you should try to change the lay out a little so those of us with less average memory retention can keep the message in our heads. Sometime the art of the peom is to say little but mean alot. You certainly know how to "mean" alot but it's the spaces that make the reader think and therefore ultimatly engage with a piece. But don't let me discourage you from some fine writing. + Report this comment |  |