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Written by August Blackwood   
Tuesday, 22 July 2008
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"Everything you do is so boring," my mother said as she slammed some papers down onto the hard Oakwood kitchen table.

 

I remained silent. I had to. What could I say? This has started again, once again after what seemed like months. I never thought her mouth would spew out daggers like this after then.

 

"You have to make it interesting. Why can't you just write something normal? This is so awkward." she said.

 

She found them, the papers of my story, lying carelessly forgotten on the kitchen table, ready for grouching, evil eyes to prey upon. The same eyes that glittered in front of me, reading and shaking in their head. What did it matter to her? It was my life. Who cares what I write about? Last time, she discovered my profoundly gory story in my room when she went in there to vacuum while I was diligently attending school. Oh, the horror that must have appeared in her eyes. Who would have ever thought that she would think of my writing in that way? Of course, she would.  Well, at least she didn't think of them as boring then. On, no, they were far from boring. They were horrific.

 

"Mama?" my sister, Emely, entered the room.

 

The distorted maternal image in front of me quickly reconstructed itself and smiled graciously at her youngest child, who happened to be on the other side of the birth order that I was. Crap, no wonder I was so twisted. But, I can't wait til Emely's dark side appears once she hits puberty. Oh, you may never know what lurks behind that innocent façade. She just can't express herself. Watch and listen, and perhaps there will be signs.

 

"Yes, dear?" mother said, quickly shutting out those demons that once appeared before me in her eyes.

 

"When's dinner?" my sister asked.

 

"I'll...get it ready..."

 

She eyed me with a sudden auric absence and lifted herself to ready the interrupting dinner.

 

I snatched the papers and rushed upstairs to slam my exorcising door behind me.

 

I could imagine my mother secretly snarling while flipping the omelets.

 

My stomach growled and I knew that in no time, she would call me back down there, ready to prong me with that white-hot hell mouth.

 

I checked my door knob to test its security. A few less pounds could be good for a change. Who needs dinner anyway? I sneered, flinging myself onto my bed and silently laughed into the drowning pillows, watered by the contrasting tears that would probably take close to fifteen minutes for me to finally notice with the darkness already stained into my system.

 

Such irony, the grossly twisted nature of me as an average human being.

"Everything you do is so boring," I heard myself say.

"I know," I said, my fleer refusing to disappear, "and so horrific."

 

"Emely! How could you say that!" the hallway outside sent me my mother's voice.

 

My, you're catching on pretty nicely, mother. I'm glad you're finally beginning to understand.

 

After a loud thump, I heard little feet scurrying up the stairs and a soft knock on my door. I quietly tiptoed to it, opened it, and peered down at my eleven-year old sister who stood there, smiling.

 

"You can eat now. Mama fainted."

"Thank you."

 

My brothers scurried about, panicking down in the kitchen, while the two sisters, Emely and I, eleven and eighteen, walked down the steps, holding hands, and giggled all the way.

 



Copyright 2008 August Blackwood
Keyword: You Can Eat Now
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Comments (30)
Posted by David Relic
2008-07-22 11:37:22
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I very much enjoyed this. It was very well written, and it kept a good pace. I found it to be a little creepy at times, but in the best way possible.

Well done!
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Posted by Gryffin
2008-07-22 11:53:12
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That was very enteraining.
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Posted by r.e.potter
2008-07-22 16:42:43
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Not sure what just happened. I assume the lil sister said something that caused her mother to faint so her older sister could go down and eat...but im not sure. The story kept my interest, but just didn't have a clear ending for me.
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Posted by stronger
2008-07-22 17:38:36
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The ending of the story was a little confusing, but overall it kept me reading and I really enjoyed it.
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Posted by ams
2008-07-22 17:46:49
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ya i didnt really get the ending. im assuming that it was something about the little sister turning over to the dark side. other than that i thought that this story was very good. it was nicely written and quite entertaining.
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Posted by resistanceisfreedom
2008-07-22 20:38:25
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hmmmm i just was baffled by this whole piece. after i read it, i sat thinking, "Okay, what the hell did this mean." just found this to be too confusing.
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Posted by C.R. Vard
2008-07-23 12:43:13
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never really knew where this one was going, i expected to learn what was in the story but never did. I still liked the end though where emely made the mother fain i thought that was pretty funny. Nothing spectacular but it was good.
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Posted by Something Indecent
2008-07-24 14:46:25
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I was kind of hoping for something more morbid or horrific. The writing was well done, the relationships were pretty good, but the action was missing. It was eerie though, I liked that.
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Posted by shagufta
2008-08-13 09:01:49
Superb

This is the most entertaining story I have ever come across. You have a good writing style too. The sisters provide the backbone of the story. Although horror is not my forte, keep it up.
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Posted by Brian W Callaghan
2008-08-13 09:15:01
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I like your discussion of the little sister's inevitable showing of a dark side, which, I assume is what came out in the end. I would have liked to know what was said or done that caused the mother to faint, but the characters are engaging and i think this could be expanded into a much more in-depth tale. Did this actually happen in some way?
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Posted by chaabuk
2008-08-13 12:28:37
Good

Probably this is the best short story I have read in recent times. It gives out those family feelings so well. I am a family oriented person so I guess this appeals to me more. But don't write horrific tales. I am no great reader of them.
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Posted by flowerclover
2008-08-13 14:21:56
Quite Interesting

Must say this piece was quite interesting. I thought the sister had killed her and then she just fainted. Good job! Keep it up!
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Posted by allmine
2008-08-13 16:09:20
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It was a good story but I am confused about what happened to make the mom faint. Maybe expound on that a little more. Otherwise this story shows the angst between mothers and their teenagers...
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Posted by darrinbouley
2008-08-14 11:41:02
A little in the dark

This short story starts with a nice hook to catch the reader. But I must say that the ending didn't have the clarity to keep me. Perhaps a tiny detail as to the sister's actions against mom would have helped to give the ending a bigger pop. Remember, inference in the reader cannot always be assumed. You, as the author, know a lot more about the intents, purposes, and themes of this piece than many of us. Again, a little more detail at the end would go a long way to making this story rock solid.
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Posted by Storyer
2008-08-14 13:58:18
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I like this. The ending was a bit confusing... in my mind the mother read one of the protagonist's stories and found it so horrific that she fainted. The confusion for me comes here, "I snatched the papers and rushed upstairs..." There were no papers for the mother to read, unless the younger daughter said something horrific to the mother. I'm not sure.

Other than that, great story.
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