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Flowers on the Wall
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Written by Tom Shandruk   
Tuesday, 22 July 2008
Flowers on the wall,
Staring back at me and laughing.
Climbing, holding on,
Up higher, higher, there they go.

Flowers on the wall,
Growing on door frames; shut the door.
Sprung from window sills,
No light gets in, the lamp stays on.

Flowers on the wall,
Grab the lamp and pull its plug out.
Darkness all around,
I hear them growing, breathing now.

Flowers on the wall,
Here from Hell to take me with them.
Ever-growing vines,
Give birth to flowers beautiful.

Flowers on the wall,
They know I'm here, but don't know where.
Grasping my throat strong,
I think they found me, here I go.

Flowers on the wall,
Bring me to my knees, I'm screaming.
Yahweh save my soul,
I've been faithful; Hear my prayer.

Flowers on the wall,
Surrounding evil weakens me.
Please Lord give me strength,
To fight this evil eating me.

Flowers on the wall,
Replace my body, skin and bones.
I see angels now,
They touch my flesh, tear through the vines.

Flowers on the wall,
Shrink back to Hell where they belong.
Angels give off light,
They light the walls like it was day.

Flowers on the wall,
Nothing left but light and loving.
Oh, God has heard me,
A humble servant, saved his life!

Flowers on the wall,
The evil grows from vine to vine.
Flowers beautiful,
Tempting me to let them grow.

Flowers on the wall,
I see one now, right by the door.
Pluck it off the wall,
Burn the petals and burn the vine.

Flowers on the wall,
Flames of life and love destroy them.
Thank you God above,
For giving strength to burn them all.





Copyright 2008 Tom Shandruk
Keyword: Temptation
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Comments (12)
Posted by Zombie Punk
2008-07-22 09:12:22
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So .... um .... my understanding of this is there some pissed off devil flowers haunting this poor dude's house.

Am I correct, or is there some secret Poetic meaning that I'm not seeing?

Uh ... who is Yahweh?

Overall, I enjoyed this Poem. It was quite entertaining.

Job well done!
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Posted by Forsaken
2008-07-22 09:13:32
nice

I liked how you kept the same subject going throughout the poem, and I liked how you repeated the words 'Flowers on the wall'. It is good how you used personification to describe how the flowers shrink and move. I like how you kept the verses roughly the same in length, also. its different how you describe the flowers as evil.

nice work!

Jess
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Posted by CDeCarlo
2008-07-22 11:54:06
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I like how he saw the flowers as evil, because usually flowers are seen as beautiful and pieces of artwork from nature. I'm not really sure what the flowers are symbolizing, but I like the poem.
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Posted by philneale1952
2008-07-22 14:06:09
Flowers

I am just sooooo glad that our bedroom wallpaper is........cream.

You are one scary dude.

Liked the poem, but will never think of flowers in the same way EVER again.

Phil
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Posted by Tom Shandruk
2008-07-22 14:08:30
Thanks everyone

I wrote this literally 20 minutes before it was published on here. I was really tired, and was humming "Riders on the Storm", when the words "Flowers on the wall" came into my head. I did what I usually do; I let my mind type out the poem with me as a passenger.

Basically, the flowers are like temptation in that they look pleasing, but soon the vines cover up everything. Kinda a little trippy symbol for how an addiction goes from "Just this one time" to "I can stop when I want" to a full-fledged consumption.

Yahweh is the Hebrew word for God, used in respect for the Lord by not calling him by his name. I figured a bunch of "Oh Lords" would get kinda boring.

Whew. I hope that cleared up any questions, and allows everyone to get a better experience from this.
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Posted by lost
2008-07-22 15:02:42
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OH, DEAR GOD!!! SATANIC FLOWERS!!!

what will lucifur come up with next?!?!

over all i REALLY liked this poem. i like the creepiness at the beginning and the strength at the end. although, ill probably be burning alot of flowers now. YOUVE MADE ME PARANOID!! i swear that plant is looking at me!!
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Posted by lemon
2008-07-22 20:03:31
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nice job. sometimes things that are evil disguise themselves as things that are beautiful and we don't notice it until it is too late.
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Posted by Captain Morgen
2008-07-22 21:09:40
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Basically anything that tastefully uses biblical imagery, I love. I read the bible a lot for inspiration, and I get this feeling that you know a little about the bible? Good job. I don't see the flowers on the wall as evil, necessarily. This reminds me of the relationship between the vine and the branch discussed in the bible. The branches cannot survive without help from the vine. The branches represent the flesh of people whereas the vine represents God. I don't know if this is what you meant by this poem, but it has given me inspiration. Well done!
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Posted by Tom Shandruk
2008-07-22 21:24:29
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I've just started reading the Bible, and I didn't have that in mind when I wrote this. I did, however, have a general idea of temptation and how it can look or actually be harmless, yet can be a part of a larger evil. That's where the flowers come in. The flowers themselves are beautiful. It was the vines that blocked the light, exit, and choked him, and unfortunately the vines are connected to the flowers.
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Posted by JJtyler
2008-07-22 22:36:14
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Wallpaper has always creeped me out, with the repetitive patterns and the happy characters it has at times.

I'm glad we don't have any here, or I might have regretted reading your poem.

Good luck, and keep writing.
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Posted by ams
2008-07-28 20:15:20
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wow. i loved this! i got the figurative part about the flowers being temptations, but i also took some of it literally. like i could just picture this guy having a breakdown in this room with a flowered wallpaper and how it was driving him crazy, being locked up in this place. but then he asks for the Lord's hep and He helps him. idk if that makes any sense.

anyways i thought that it was wonderfuloy written. i liked how you wrote flowers on the wall at the beginning of each stanza to stress that point. i also thought that it flowed nicely.
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Posted by Tarhead Mugwump
2008-07-30 11:15:45
and now a message from the mundane side

wow! didn't think that would fit in the title screen!

i ran through all of the spiritual sort of comments and thought them interesting - but remained somewhat grounded as i read. i was, in fact, a little surprised when i read them, as the thought never occurred to me.

my experience with vines has always been associated with them being natures ultimate wrecking ball.

"here, look at this beautiful flower" - while i slowly destroy your house by sliding my tentacles into the mortar between the bricks, and under the shake siding on your house...

well done tom!
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