Wall of Hate

I can see the pieces of myself

Floating away, they try to seek help

Don't you see all the pain that surrounds

Is it too much to open your eyes to take a look around

Not everything is made of sugar coated bliss

Behind a wall she sits, cutting away at her wrist

But she will never get the help she needs

Ignorant souls pass her by, just letting her bleed

Slowly, it will just consume her veins

She will get tired of begging for change

And her heartful pleas will go unanswered

And the pain will eat at her like a cancer

I know this, because I stand here with my every scar

My own brain, I can no longer guard

After all this time, nothing has healed

I'm realizing it's my fate that has been sealed

I always try to break through, try to break free

But it's of no use, my wall of hate is all that I see

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Posted by lemon 2008-07-21 21:36:05 .... Once again, nicely done. Always your emotion is described fluidly. Loved the lines 'don't you see the pain that surrounds Is it too much to open your eyes to take a look around' + Report this comment
Posted by Mokusa 2008-07-21 22:09:52 .... Wow, thats a really excellent poem. You used a very tasteful choice of rhymes and it has an excellent flow to it as well. Sorrow definitely is you thing! Keep it up. + Report this comment
Posted by C.R. Vard 2008-07-21 23:06:34 .... liked the rhyme sceme and how each couplet led into the other. reminded me a bit of pink floyd's the wall...well until the end. anyways, great poem with an equally great meaning. + Report this comment
Posted by otacon420 2008-07-21 23:26:59 .... yeah it was a nice poem very dramatic but i dont think the title of it was appropiate a wall of hate? it seems that this person is sad i'm not sure how well it ties to together maybe i'm just confused and need to be enlightened + Report this comment
Posted by Zombie Punk 2008-07-22 05:09:51 .... Hate the scum in the world. Hate the world. Hate fucking Hollywood. Why everybody have green colored skin? hahaha then we'd see past their money and for the slime they really all---okay, dont know why i typed that but fuck it, I'm leaving it. Great poem, O' Sorrowful One. Keep 'em comin, man. + Report this comment
Posted by Something Indecent 2008-07-22 20:11:52 .... That did flow very nicely. Good work. I liked the wording, it didn't seem shoved in there like a mishapen puzzle piece. Always a good thing. Keep it up. + Report this comment
Posted by David Relic 2008-07-22 22:03:42 .... wow. That was really good. Great flow. It thought you did a real great job with this! I hope you have some more ont he way. This was really well written. + Report this comment
Posted by ams 2008-07-22 22:10:59 .... yes, that poem was quite beautiful. a lot of emotion was put into it and it flowed nicely. its a little dark, but still beautiful. + Report this comment
Posted by JJtyler 2008-07-23 00:00:42 .... Good poem. This is the fourth item I've read about suicide/cutting tonight and I'm feeling a bit drained. I believe I'll go watch some Oswald, my infant daughter's favorite show. Good luck and keep writing. + Report this comment

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