I'm Only Locked In Place

I'm sitting here, locked in place

Slowly but surely my views get erased

And still you are nowhere in sight, the hours drift by

Once again, the cold realization of being hung out to dry

But I can't say this wasn't expected

From day one my soul has always been rejected

From the people who point, fingers extended

From their golden thrones, they have descended

Know that I've tried to look at this with pacified eyes

But your betrayal eats at me from the inside

Now I can only hold on to what remains

That being the lonely sorrow that's piling up in my brain

Sadly, my prayers no longer find their way to the bright star

Why waste the time, when nothing exists up that far

No hand from the sky will give to me my dreams

But the demons are always there to consume my screams

My tears crawl back as I realize you aren't there

Everything goes abstract, as my heart endures its final tear

The machines, they have locked me into place

While you just stand there, laughing at the bruises on my face

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Posted by colemoriss 2008-07-16 21:30:07 .... sorrow realy is your mask isnt it. sad, disturbing poem. i liked it, it was well written. it, sorta reminded me, faintly, of the raven poem. you will be the next edgar allen poe, my friend. im sure. brighten up though, im wondering what your like in real life. + Report this comment
Posted by lemon 2008-07-16 21:30:44 .... Nice. As usual this was well done. I tripped over a couple of the longer stanzas but I liked what you are saying. 'know that i've tried to look at this with pacified eyes But your betrayal eats at me from the inside' Great job. =] + Report this comment
Posted by Mokusa 2008-07-16 23:27:47 .... Yeah this is beautifully written. Very well done. If I were to nitpick this I would only have one suggestion. When you say "From the people who point, fingers extended" this is redundant because pointing implies the extended finger :) Maybe it could read something like "From the people who stare (or a better word), with fingers extended". + Report this comment
Posted by Hodders 2008-07-17 09:43:05 .... Well written, interesting poem. I really liked it! I really liked the last stanza and I think that made the poem for me along with the line 'the cold realization of being hung out to dry'. It flowed well and was a great read! + Report this comment
Posted by CDeCarlo 2008-07-17 18:16:59 .... I love the vibe and feeling this poem has. I like how everything in this poem just sort of falls into place. It works, and it really expresses some true emotion. Nice work. + Report this comment
Posted by Forsaken 2008-07-18 06:52:32 Nice! I really liked this poem. This is very dark and well written. It's a sad poem in that it is from the point of view of someone who is suffering and defeated. I read this and thought Wow because it's such powerful stuff! Nice job! + Report this comment

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