Posted by MeredithsMontage
2008-07-15 04:32:58
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This was very sad. I really liked it, but sad. It flowed nicely, considering it was not all much of a rhyming scheme, I like that. I always wish I could write poetry like this. I tried once and it sounded more like DR. Seuss.
Excellent work.
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Posted by Zombie Punk
2008-07-15 05:22:14
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Great Poem as usual, Pollyanna. Just think, before long you'll be in good ole Dublin. You will make it there.
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Posted by Junglecan
2008-07-15 10:59:12
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I liked this one, short and to the point, poeple are always informing that as a rule in poetry you have to use metaphors and similies and so forth. but ive always been a believer in just saying what you feel and getting to the point...you've done that succesfully.
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Posted by June Eclipsis
2008-07-15 12:15:10
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Hi, Anna! This was brilliantly done and I felt that I was able to relate to it. How often does it seem as though we are tormented by the thoughts that scurry about in the most complex ways and prompt us to the chase them? It does feel sad that it becomes hard to remember the times in which we can pace ourselves and slowly observe the beautiful things of this world.
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Posted by brandon_scott
2008-07-15 14:31:05
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I thouroughly enjoyed this poem, as I am one who spends a great deal of time living in his head, just like the subject of the poem. I can easily relate.
Beautifully done!
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Posted by brandon_scott
2008-07-15 14:32:43
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The pic at the top- is that Helena Bonham-Carter?
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Posted by Kasi elaborated
2008-07-15 14:35:39
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I have similar feelings often, You always seem to choose the most precise picture to convey your poems emotion... your a regular pro, but I'm sure you know that!
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Posted by Something Indecent
2008-07-16 08:07:15
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This is a pretty sad poem. I think you conveyed the isolation and immobility rather well along with the haunting reflection that stared back. You're so dark anna.
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Posted by Someone Indifferent
2008-07-21 12:38:22
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This was beautifully dark. The way the character reminisced about things she missed was really good. 'Or feeling inspiration in a single breath of air' spoken like a true Poet.
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Posted by Tarhead Mugwump
2008-07-27 10:35:38
my mom
used to tell me i need to climb out of my head once in a while. with adhd that can be a complicated process... i liked it in there because i never failed. there was no risk, and there was plenty of soft gray stuff to land on if i fell.
the poem brings me back to when my kids were in their early to middle teens, and before them were all of the things they thought they could not be - and now there are all of the things that they became.
i talk to much, i'll shut up now.
write on!
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Posted by chaabuk
2008-08-01 02:01:02
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You find solace in surreal world. People such as these, should make more friends and go for more outings. It not only clear thoughts, it helps to understand others. Good perspective.
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Posted by Terry Collett
2008-08-06 12:19:56
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At your lyrical best. The theme is great. How I missed this I do not know.
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