Golden glows of yellows flutter through filtered leaves of green, casting shadows upon overgrown graves left desolate from days of old. It was here that humanity began in harmony, strolling hand in hand through graceful meadows filled with lilacs and lilies. Thoughts paving paths for idealistic identities who ponder frequently free philosophies, thus enabling mankind to meditate and muse over the poetic passion of God's creation. Now, filtered through time and tyranny, civilization is orchestrated by organized orgies. For free thought to reign once more from purity instead of polygamy, it needs to divorce the shallow shadows created by a communist consciousness; maybe then shall we dare to dance. . .

dare to sing. . .

Dare To Be Free!

Keyword: Dare To Be Free!

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Posted by lemon 2008-07-14 14:03:01 .... Have you been listening to 'I hope you dance' again? lol just kidding. This was very descriptive but about 8 lines in I thought you kind of went on the tongue twister route. 'thoughts paving paths for idealistic identities that ponder frequently free philosophies' yikes lol. I understand what you are saying in the poem, but poetically it doesnt flow well. Just my opinion of course. It just doesnt seem as good as your other stuff. + Report this comment
Posted by scooby 2008-07-14 14:43:34 Wow Matt, you've done it once again, you went over my head! Yet, this poem, after reading it a couple times, is beautiful. Three thumbs up!! + Report this comment
Posted by allmine 2008-07-14 15:29:12 .... I think this would have been better off not as a poem, but as a paragraph of stream-of-consciousness writing. I liked the words, but it didn't flow well as a poem, you know? + Report this comment
Posted by Pilgrim 2008-07-14 15:42:32 .... Okay, allmine, I took your advice and changed the format away from poetry. I think it does sound better this way. Thanks. + Report this comment
Posted by allmine 2008-07-14 15:43:54 .... Whoo hoo, much better...at least to me. Glad that something I said, someone actually followed and that it made sense to them!!! + Report this comment
Posted by lemon 2008-07-14 16:29:32 .... MUCH BETTER. Now it flows because you are just streaming instead of trying to create breaks and pauses. It's a lot more powerful this way. nice job =] + Report this comment
Posted by brandon_scott 2008-07-14 17:56:20 .... Another five-star poem. But you knew I would give you that, didn't you? It's like you wrote it for me. You're a sweetheart, no matter what the ButtPirates (Sterling?) say. Seriously, though, it has a good message and good flow. Keep it up. This is one for the favs. + Report this comment
Posted by kelvin carl 2008-09-09 14:07:01 i dare This was amazing. I spend lots of time outside, under trees, and have been struggling to put words to this scene but "golden glows of yellows flutter through filtered leaves of green" resonates beautifully. Also, the idea behind this poem is one which anyone half-aware can relate to. Well done. + Report this comment

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