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Her Magic Touch, Chapter 4

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Her Most Loyal Man


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Written by J.J   
Sunday, 13 July 2008


Time and time again
under the cold gaze of the moon
he stands for her, watching, ready
to protect her: her guardian angel.
He'd do anything for his love
and she hates him.

 

He calls her every night,
to tell her he misses
the sweet caress of her voice
on his unworthy ear.
He begs her to come over
and hears only the dial tone.

 

Outside her house yet again
staring, lovelorn, at her window.
He doesn't care what his friends say
or what anyone says anymore.
He's the only one who understands her
but he can't remember her last name.

 

He's a patient man; it's been a year
since she smiled and said hello
and he found his one true love.
She's had other boyfriends, true
but she will,and she has to
realize that his love is the only one
even though she's not smiled since then. 

 

He wants her in every way, every day
he wants to be her sweet Valentine
to run his fingers through that hair               to take her hand in marriage,
lead her into the honeymoon suite
he's spilt so much love over her already
he can't wait to spill it inside her.

 

Her friends say she's really scared
that she has no interest in such a creep.
But it's not like that: he'd die for her
he'll do anything his love asks
except leave her alone
or stop telling her she's beautiful.



Copyright 2008 J.J
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Comments (8)
Posted by Mokusa
2008-07-13 17:11:14
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Interesting. It's nice to see a non-rhyming poem for once, and the ending makes it clear this is not the same old love poem. I liked it. Keep it up!
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Posted by lemon
2008-07-13 18:55:37
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creepy. This definitely had the creepy vibe to it. Well written though except for two parts that I saw. 'He'd do anything for his love' I'm assuming you meant for HER love? you also might want to fix that ine where the 'to' is waaaay over on the right side.

Great emotion and good rhythm. keep it coming =]
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Posted by brandon_scott
2008-07-13 18:58:48
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Wow, that was really good, in a creepy, stalker sort of way. I agree that it's nice to see a non-rhyming poem again. This was well written and flowed well. Keep up the good work.
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Posted by soulwriter
2008-07-13 19:07:37
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Damn, can't seem to fix it.

By the by, I should say that the guy in the poem isn't me.
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Posted by The 13th
2008-07-14 13:00:30
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Great subject, very different.

Thought it was pretty good.
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Posted by allmine
2008-07-14 15:34:28
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Oooh a stalker, interesting. Liked the flow of the poetry. There is a line in the frist stanza that doesn't make sense...something about he loves him? But the rest of it was good, and chilling....
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Posted by soulwriter
2008-07-14 15:38:21
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"his love" - it means as in she is his love - he's referring to her as "his love". He thinks he is in love with her, and calls her his love, as in "his one true love".
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Posted by chaabuk
2008-07-23 19:12:36
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Wow. This is excellent. A man's unwavering love for the girl and her intense dislike for him. This is where trust comes in. Till the time he can win her over by his selflessness, he must keep waiting. Good.
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