Posted by Xena
2008-07-13 01:03:25
thtat is
exactly the definition of frostration... but if it was suppoesed to ryme the last line didnt. i dont know it kind of threw me a curve ball.. but it was good... portrait of frustration
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Posted by Something Indecent
2008-07-13 01:13:00
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A nice little ditty about frustration. I'm surprised there wasn't any blood or chunks of flesh when you pulled your hair out. I thought the ending rhymed fine. I like the hope that it will end by tomorrow.
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Posted by Hodders
2008-07-13 05:35:11
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I loved it! The way you read it mirrors frustration very well. The only bit I didn't like so much was the last couple of lines, for some reason they just didn't seem to fit for me.
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Posted by Pilgrim
2008-07-13 10:24:58
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This was short, precise, and to the point. The shortness of the poem reflects the longevity of frustration itself. It only takes a second to get mad and blow a gasket. Many a time there has been when I have busted a knuckle against a wall.
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Posted by resistanceisfreedom
2008-07-13 11:08:19
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i think you did portray frustration very well.....but the last lines of this didn't fit right with me.
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Posted by brandon_scott
2008-07-13 11:27:36
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Yeah, what they said.
I thought it was a good poem, too. Short, and not quite as graphically grotesque as what we're used to seeing from you, but I liked it.
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Posted by lemon
2008-07-13 12:17:13
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Oh my, you ARE frustrated aren't you? lol. This was pretty good Max. You've been bitten by the poetry bug haven't you?! haha =]
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Posted by philneale1952
2008-07-13 14:09:28
Exams............................
This is the feeling the week immediately prior to ALL of my accountancy exams.
Doesn't matter how good the revision has been, the mind goes completely blank as the memory chips in the brain turn off.
Relief at the exam room door when they all come back on and you gaze aroung the Atrium at the saddos who've left it to the last minute to bring their 'crash' notes with them.
Oh, frabsious day. Galloo gallay (Jabberwocky) - recommended reading............trust me!
Max, have you found your medium?
Good verse.
Phil
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Posted by flossy
2008-07-13 14:12:53
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This is exactly how I felt when my wife told me we were having twins.
To be honest really jelous of your poetry.I tried myself but I crashed and burned.
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Posted by Kasi elaborated
2008-07-13 15:07:14
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Short and definitely to the point. Man, I hope it does end tomorrow... At first I thought this was Zombie poem... But you know what I guess it really is. lol.
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Posted by soulwriter
2008-07-13 16:41:44
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I don't know. You do a fair enough job of describing frustration, but it reads too much like song lyrics. Like something that was written for the way it sounded, as opposed to what it says. You dig?
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Posted by June Eclipsis
2008-07-15 12:29:05
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Hmmm...Phantom pain, eh? That's a very interesting wway to put it. Anyway, I think this was well done even though it was pretty short. It was strong and very relatable. Great job!
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Posted by colemoriss
2008-07-20 14:25:55
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your preaching to the quior brother! amen, hallejuh! this is what frustration is. finally someone gets it right. i feel bad for you if you experience frustration enough to nail it on the spot.
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Posted by Tom Shandruk
2008-07-22 19:45:53
Great Job
This was done very well. I especially liked the choice of font.
You conveyed the feeling of pure frustration very well, with universal wording that can apply the feeling in any context. I really like this; Good job :)
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Posted by harmattan
2008-08-02 16:44:50
frustration
What is frustration.
Maybe i would be a better poet if I had some.
I have lived my life to the tune of WC Fields
If at first you do not succeed,
Give up, No use being a damn fool about it.
Mind you he also said
Sometimes you have to take the bull by the tail and face the situation.
or
who said
Don't get mad
Get even.
or, as the great Don Revie and the nearly as great Bill Shankley are reputed to have said at the same time on the same day
Get your retaliation in first.
Now I am going to look down your list for some comedy
I hope I find some
Kind regards
harmattan.
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