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Written by August Blackwood   
Saturday, 12 July 2008
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A bright light pierces

The surface of my home.

My dell laptop placed in front of me

As the aura sinks into my torpid body.

Time passes slowly and shadows reflect

Off my garage wall,

White from acrylic paint.

And give my opinion some thoughts to be pondered upon.

Peacefulness survives every minute

From the soft, gradual chaos

rising from

Corners of unknown dimensions,

Sensed,

Yet hidden by the disguise of caressing life.

The feelings of my soul

Are immune to my surroundings

As I consistently type this poem,

The words extending every second

Like a stretching snake

Clad in intricate and uneven patterns

Of arcane, yet common designs.

My birth, my family, my life

Surrounded by this blinding light

That reveals all the hidden havens

Of darkness,

Disappearance declined by nature.

Covert ambitions silenced by

Events following the clock's pace,

Tempo kept in concurrent motion.

A saddening thought traces through

Fibers of wood, snapping its

Essence into a sucking cave,

Physical signs relinquished.

My eyes close

I lean back.

My fingers twitch

And my face shows its vacancy to the sky above.

 

 



Copyright 2008 August Blackwood
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Comments (7)
Posted by Hodders
2008-07-12 11:34:08
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Brilliant! Another poem for my favourites I think. The wonderfully vivid descriptions were very well written. There are a lot of great lines in this but the one that stood out for me was 'That reveals all hidden havens/Of darkness'. Superb writing!
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Posted by brandon_scott
2008-07-12 13:29:18
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It was pretty well written, but I'm not sure what it was about? Is the writer going through writers block? That's what I get from the last four lines.

Also, call me dense, but are you referring to the sun when you talk of the bright light that pierces the surface of his home?
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Posted by resistanceisfreedom
2008-07-12 17:49:35
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Your work always seems to be the most vivid. Well done!
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Posted by Amatayo
2008-07-13 01:18:36
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yeah

this was good
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Posted by Pilgrim
2008-07-13 10:48:51
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I liked this. You know how to use and place words very well. The flow is good and your thoughts well portrayed.
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Posted by Mokusa
2008-07-13 23:16:20
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I liked this a lot. I'm pretty sure I understood the meaning of the poem and I'm pretty sure that the bright light was not the sun since the writer is in their garage in front of a bright laptop screen. I see this as a poem about searching for inspiration.

I like the line 'the feelings of my soul are immune to my surroundings.'
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Posted by colemoriss
2008-07-14 22:54:13
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THIS WAS WELL WRITTEN. BIG WORDS, WITH BIG MEANINGS, YADDA, YADDA, BUT I FEEL IT LACKEDREASON, OR MEANING. I DID NOT UNDERSTAND A WORD OF IT, IM SORRY. THIS IS JUST MY OPINION, FORGIVE ME, IM NOT TRYING TO BE CRUEL. P.S. EVERYTHING STARTS OFF WERE IT CANT BE UNDERSTOOD, THATS WHY YOU IMPROVE.
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