He knew she was shy, she had been since the day they first met. But he figured that since they had been together now for a little over two months she would start to loosen up. Apparently not. She still never kissed him first, she always waited for him to initiate things. That was ok. He knew she would come around as soon as she knew just how much he loved her. He told her every day, but her smiles always seemed reluctant, almost like she knew he would break her heart regardless of what he told her. He always hugged her close, and when he wasn't at work at the factory, he spent all of his time with her.

He loved to run his fingers through her hair while she slept next to him in the small trailer they shared that was parked by itself five miles West of the parts factory. He hated parking in the parks where the neighbors were all within shouting distance. He enjoyed the close quarters that they shared because no matter where he was, she was always within arms reach. He could be lounging on the bed watching his satellite T.V. and still be able to reach out and lovingly rub her back while she washed the dishes. When she relaxed enough to take naps in the day after a sleepless night, he loved that he could watch her sleep without disturbing her as he surfed the net on his laptop in the tiny kitchen area. Mostly he loved that when she came out of the bathroom fresh from a shower smelling sweetly of the soaps and shampoos he had bought for her, he could easily maneuver her to the bed they shared with only a few steps. He thought it was sweet how she still trembled each time they made love and how she was always moved to tears each time afterward. That only served to make him love her more.

Sometimes he found her crying softly at the small table when he returned home from the factory. He always rushed to her side and tried to comfort her while she cried about missing her family back home. He never knew what to say because he always felt like he should be enough and the only family that she needed. Her parents weren't good people and he believed that he had saved her from them when they moved away from them. He didn't understand why she didn't see that too.

Someday he knew that she would realize the day he grabbed her and stuffed her into his van while she was on her way home from high school was the best day of her life. Until then, he would just have to be patient and keep telling her how much he loved her and that she didn't have to be afraid of him. The sooner she realized that he was the best thing for her and that she loved him too, the sooner he could stop locking the trailer door from the outside and chaining her to the table before he left for the factory each morning. Then they could be happy. Then she would truly be his.

Keyword: kidnapping abuse messed up love

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Posted by Zombie Punk 2008-07-11 14:28:20 .... Whoa! I was not expecting that at least bit! Extemley well written with a great ending. Kudos on a job well done. That last paragraph was terrific! + Report this comment
Posted by sebcoco 2008-07-11 14:37:18 .... Good! The ending was really unexpected. I wouldn't have imagine it. + Report this comment
Posted by The 13th 2008-07-11 14:44:39 .... Good story, nice little twist at the end + Report this comment
Posted by brandon_scott 2008-07-11 16:00:49 .... WOW! This was a good, twisted story. This is what good reading is all about. It's definitely going into my favorites. Keep up the good work! + Report this comment
Posted by Dr Lucifer 2008-07-11 16:05:20 Caught me by surprise. I didn't see that coming. I like the way you sucked me in and then bang, it suddenly hit me that this guy is a monster. Unfortunately, chains can take many forms. Steel chains are not always necessary. Many women are living in so much fear that they are incapacitated and cannot run even though they could. Well done. + Report this comment
Posted by resistanceisfreedom 2008-07-11 20:52:36 .... very good. what i was expecting at the beginning of this was definitely not the ending i got. you really did well with the twist. definitely a good read. + Report this comment
Posted by Something Indecent 2008-07-11 22:41:29 .... I knew something was coming at the end. If you wrote it, something weird happens. That's what I figure. At first I thought she was dead and he was insane. But I'm glad that she was alive and he was insane. Overall I'm pretty sure you're insane. Great short! + Report this comment
Posted by Pilgrim 2008-07-13 12:47:53 .... Shocking. Disturbing. Frightening. All these things make for a good story. Yet, in this world, things like this actually take place. I guess that's what makes this story so good. You did a very good job. + Report this comment
Posted by philneale1952 2008-07-13 15:03:53 Sound Talk about a sting in the tail.........you been reading Jeffery Deaver? This was awesome, scary, disturbing..........made the flesh crawl. Flash fiction at its most brutal. Didn't know you could do this. 10/10 Phil + Report this comment
Posted by lemon 2008-07-13 15:48:13 .... It seems I'm full of surprises eh? I saw a snippet of a commercial that was showing faces of missing teens. It instantly inspired me to write this. Took all of 45 minutes for this to spill from my fingertips. Thanks for the comments everyone! + Report this comment
Posted by alfred 2008-07-13 17:49:27 .... 45 minutes I would have guessed. Was this the only trailer in the park, and was the dining room table she was chained to made of steel. Oh, and was she mute and brainless. If she just sat on the chair looking at the chain around the leg or whatever all day long and never screaming while the residents of the trailer park were outside walking their dobermans, she must have been blonde. If it was a house with a basement it would be more believeable. This story was just a lil sour lemon. + Report this comment
Posted by allmine 2008-07-14 16:01:30 .... What a twist. I loved it. This was intense and made you wonder if she had been raped before, or if she was just that shy, but NO! Sick and twisted, just the way I like em... + Report this comment
Posted by r.e.potter 2008-07-14 16:11:48 .... Good quick little story. Kinda have to agree with Alfred just a tad however. Wheres everybody at when he leaves her alone? No disrespect to the trailer park residents, but there usually lined up within shouting distant. Maybe if you add a touch of seclusion it would be more do-able(think I just made up a word). But it was a neat twist. I like that in any story since im a twisted guy. + Report this comment
Posted by lemon 2008-07-14 16:39:40 THANK YOU Ok Potter, and Alfred. I surrender. I fixed the holes, rather reluctantly lol, but It does make a little more sense. Thanks for being brutally honest =] + Report this comment
Posted by r.e.potter 2008-07-14 16:47:51 .... lol...if only stephen king took my advice on 'Misery' and had the two get married in the end and have kids, that movie would be so much better too. + Report this comment
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