As dust particles twist around my bed.

The birds chirp and sing their songs.

As a blaring white noise moves me along.

I sit up and wipe my eyes.

Wondering what this day will derive.


Will I find comfort, peace and joy?

Or will I just stay so annoyed.

Moving ahead I start to go, for who really knows?

Keyword: Good Morning

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Posted by Zombie Punk 2008-07-10 00:34:36 .... I have a question. What's the point of this? + Report this comment
Posted by Amatayo 2008-07-10 00:57:51 .... This is a descriptions of a morning. Thats why it starts out with golden beams. ( aka sun beams.) + Report this comment
Posted by Zombie Punk 2008-07-10 00:58:19 .... okiedokie + Report this comment
Posted by philneale1952 2008-07-10 01:29:05 .... Found this uplifting. Why do tyour eyes get whipped? Have they been naughty? Sorry, sarky me....... Nice poem - drags me back to reading the genre. Phil + Report this comment
Posted by lemon 2008-07-10 10:56:45 lol Phil. Amatayo- the poem is simple and nice, but you have a couple errors in there. 'the bird(BIRDS) chirp and sing there(THEIR) songs' 'I sit up and whip(WIPE) my eyes' all in all it was a cute, simple poem about how when we first open our eyes we have no idea how the day will be. nice =] + Report this comment
Posted by ams 2008-07-10 11:41:19 .... yes, it was a simple poem but i think that that was part of the niceness about it. it was very cute and i liked the concept of every day holding new adventures. it reminded me of my day yesterday for some reason. + Report this comment
Posted by resistanceisfreedom 2008-07-10 20:24:05 .... i actually found myself liking this alot. like lemon said, this showed how the day will go is completely anyone's guess. but i have to say, your spelling mistakes really are irritating because you're misspelling simple words. i'm not one who usually cares about mistakes, but yours always stop me and then i have to read over your line to guess the word you spelled wrong. if i would have read this without the mistakes, i probably would have enjoyed it alot more. + Report this comment
Posted by Darkromance28 2008-07-11 05:10:58 .... I feel that i have enjoyed this poem. I mean i used to write poetry before, but then i wasn't inspired enough to write, so if you still feel the spark inside, i hope you will continue to write. + Report this comment

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