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SHADOW OF THE FALLEN, Chapter 1


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Written by jake   
Tuesday, 08 July 2008
"Is this good baby?",he asked his lady friend, for lack of better term.

"Oh, yeah..."

"How about this?"

He kissed her neck, then she gave a slight scream.

"Oww, that hurt!"

He rose up his face.

"Im sorry, i just couldnt help myself, you look so tasty..." as he talked she noticed he had fangs. She

screamed,and he bared into her neck. Her scream pierced the darkness of the night. Then a voice spoke

up.

"Hey you, no midnight snacks!"

The vampire looked up,halfway down the alley was a tall man,with shaved hair. he wore a long,leather,

black coat. In one hand,he had a bottle of whiskey, in the other, in his mouth, he had a cigarett, its head

glowing orange. The vampire hissed, and jumped forwed into the air. He soared, and seemed to glide.

The man laughed.

"Ahh,so we have a ballarena... i know how to deal with those."

he dropped his cigarette into the bottle, and threw it at the vampire. It blew up in mid-air, there was a

nasty screech, like a bats, and a crispy corpse fell to the ground, its face blown off its head.

"Ha!! look at that, one point for me,none for you!"

The girl sat down on the ground,shuttering.

"Thank you..."she managed.

"How can i repay you?"

"Well,you know, i could use another drink..."

 "Whatever you want ..."

"you know, i promised god id fight and defend, but i didnt sy i would do it sobber!"

 "s-so,d-do you have a name?"

"Hunter..."

Copyright 2008 jake
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Comments (5)
Posted by colemoriss
2008-07-09 00:03:23
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HI
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Posted by Zombie Punk
2008-07-09 00:04:45
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hello
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Posted by Fallat
2008-07-10 16:27:58
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It's not bad. I like the idea, but I think it is a little short for a chapter. But if you are going to make all the chapters that long, then I applaud you. I also think you could have given more atmosphere and description of your characters.
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Posted by Xena
2008-07-11 00:47:40
ahh

great... this guys is gonna kick some fucking ass huh,, but i hope thats not his only powers... throwing flaming cocktails and womanizing... but that would still be kool if it was. keep it up
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Posted by flossy
2008-07-11 00:54:29
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Watch your grammar and layout.Story was'nt bad.Very keen to see where this is going.But it could be so much better if you listened to us in chapter 0.
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