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Written by Sorrow Is My Mask

Tuesday, 08 July 2008

Pulled Apart

The sands of time build up in my eye

Sometimes I still just sit down and cry

This hurricane of loss

Always engulfs my every peaceful thought

Earth I believe, is a horrible place

The evidence lies with the cracks on my face

But what do you really see when you look my way

When I stand before you, do you ever feel afraid?

Under all my flesh you have found my broken heart

Every smile of mine you know gets pulled apart

But somehow you always manage to hold me close

Being in your arms, takes away every single ghost

So forever with you I wish to remain

Deep inside you I crawl, a warm shelter from the rain

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Posted by Zombie Punk 2008-07-08 19:19:17 .... This was a little happier than your other poems. I liked it. I've run out of things to say about your poems, though. They are all really fucking good, and they always seem to flow with such ease. So.....keep em comin! + Report this comment
Posted by r.e.potter 2008-07-08 20:25:08 .... Question, are you the angel of death. Just kidding of course. I'm retracting that last comment in case you really are by the way. I gave Mr. Collett a challenge when he was on here. To write a happy cheerful poem. He got halfway through his poem and it turned dark. He failed. I believe there is sunshine in your heart however, and you could write an entire poem of love and bliss. Ok, this is where you tell me to blow it out my ass. This, like all your poems are dark in nature, but that is a talent in its self. + Report this comment
Posted by Dirkin 2008-07-08 20:26:56 .... consistently good like all your poems + Report this comment
Posted by jienee 2008-07-08 21:29:59 .... Nice one :-) Poem must be coming from the heart so guess you're happier this days :) + Report this comment
Posted by resistanceisfreedom 2008-07-08 21:38:39 .... haha yea Potter you actually gave me that same task a while back....and i actually wrote a poem that i thought was on the brighter side but maybe you don't think so....it's called "The Good Soldier" i wrote that one way back so it'll be somewhere in my 7 pages of poetry haha. + Report this comment
Posted by resistanceisfreedom 2008-07-08 21:43:14 .... oh and i actually just remembered i also have a more recent poem that i wrote that is definitely on the brighter side of things. that one's called "Life As It Stands" so if you want to check that one out...see if it's good enough to pass your challenge lol. + Report this comment
Posted by colemoriss 2008-07-08 22:39:00 .... this was really good. i liked it, it was a very interesting poem. dark, like most of the poems posted on this website. i mean, is anyone happy?like at all. some of thes people need like, idk, a puppy or something, youknow. + Report this comment
Posted by Zombie Punk 2008-07-08 22:41:08 .... I had a puppy once, but then I impaled it with a very dull stick. + Report this comment
Posted by lemon 2008-07-08 23:33:52 .... This was really great! You start out kind of morose, then at the end you seem to gain hope. I love how you aren't afraid to put something of yourself in each of your poems. It gives us all a glimpse of the person you are. =] + Report this comment
Posted by Sad Sara 2008-07-08 23:35:53 .... This hurricane of loss Always engulfs my every peaceful thought -Ooh Sorrowful One, I am definitely diggin' these lines. Especially 'This hurricane of loss' that juss sounds so damn Poetically cool, I love it. Awesome verse, of course. Take care, 'Anna + Report this comment
Posted by philneale1952 2008-07-09 03:41:08 .... I suppose the clue is always there - in your name. Been in places where you 'live', but at 55 going on 56 I think I've come through that part of my life. Still got the memories though, and they're not all good. Nice flow, good subject. Touches the heart (no sarcasm from me). Phil + Report this comment
Posted by indianaman130 2008-07-09 11:28:02 .... Happiness and depression. Which is easier to see, which is easier to be? How would we know Happiness with out knowing depression? Find what makes you happy and cut out those dark things that drag you down. Sun is always rising somewhere if you look. + Report this comment
Posted by Hodders 2008-07-09 14:20:48 .... It was good but sometimes i felt you were rhyming for the sake of it. Liked the emotion put into the poem though and the theme of it. + Report this comment
Posted by CliffMitchell 2008-07-09 21:36:52 .... It's amazing how it only takes one person to bring you shelter amongst a storm, whether it be a loved one or a true friend. I like the somber overtone you placed in this writing of hope. + Report this comment
Posted by Amatayo 2008-07-10 01:15:48 .... WOW every one keeps saying this is happier than usual. If that is true what do you go through. But this was nice. goin crazy. + Report this comment
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