To Get Back To The Start

My confused mind breaks here at the seam

It's hard to take in, realizing you are just a dream

A dream that only drug me further down below

That only taught me how to lose control

My insanity, it grows with every day

To mend, I've tried to find a way

But to cure something that's too far gone

It's like trying to forget  a beautiful song

A song where the lyrics find their way to your heart

To the point where you're dying to get back to the start

A point where you feel non-existant

Waiting for the world to end in an instant

And I'm feeling this way all of the time

Eventually it will kill me

Writing these miserable bloody rhymes

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Posted by brandon_scott 2008-07-07 14:50:47 .... Wow. Hey pal, if you don't like writing, maybe you could try pottery or painting or dancing or something. Your miserable bloody lines are usually really good, but for some reason this one felt a little off. I'm not sure what it is. + Report this comment
Posted by philneale1952 2008-07-07 16:28:40 .... Maybe it's late, maybe you need a retread or an MOT. Perhaps the words need reindexing. Perhaps I should just shut up. Liked the pome (NOT misspelt) Phil + Report this comment
Posted by indianaman130 2008-07-07 16:54:29 .... I think any good poet writes with emotion. trying to express fellings (lol) with scratches on paper or corralled pixels is not easy. rhymes bloody well too with a good flow and rhythm + Report this comment
Posted by Zombie Punk 2008-07-07 17:57:02 .... It seems you dont like writing anymore, but most people dont. Its like a drug that consumes our bodies. Hmmm....I hope you dont get angry when I say your poems remind me of Linkin Park, because I mean it as a compliment. Really. This one, too. Now its stuck in my head, and I can't forget it. + Report this comment
Posted by Kasi elaborated 2008-07-07 18:58:56 .... I find that most good writing is quite depressing, mainly because the most intense feelings in life are depressing. This is a good poem in that it conveys feeling and its perpetual notions. + Report this comment
Posted by ams 2008-07-07 19:09:36 .... i thought that this was really nice. i feel the same way sometimes, that writing puts you in an imaginary world, when all you want is reality. the poem also had a nice flow to it. i was just wondering, is 'drug' in the third line suppose to be dug? + Report this comment
Posted by resistanceisfreedom 2008-07-07 20:46:59 .... no it's supposed to be drug, you know like pulling me down below?? or did i use that wrong? well i'm so surprised by the amount of comments that i have received on this...i just submitted it today, so thank you all for your comments. + Report this comment
Posted by lemon 2008-07-07 20:53:19 .... Well done! this one was really melancholy eh? I loved the lines 'A song where the lyrics find their way to your heart To the point where you're dying to get back to the start' Great Job as always =] + Report this comment
Posted by Amatayo 2008-07-08 00:11:47 .... This poem really reminds me, of me. For I find myself feeling like this. Because I sometimes just don't feel like writing but then I don't no I just do. It really is an addiction. + Report this comment
Posted by Terry Collett 2008-09-16 12:32:28 .... I am still searching around for your poems and reading when I can. Well worth the search. You have the knack of reaching in and pulling out from your soul these words and images to convey the hurts and pains. Very good. + Report this comment
Posted by resistanceisfreedom 2008-09-16 16:13:22 .... well Terry please search around as much as you like....i am just so glad you are because all of my early pieces just don't get any attention anymore....i mean yea i know i have nine or so pages of writing....but i wish some poeple could take the time to look at my earlier work as well. so the fact that you are taking that time out of your day to look at my earlier works.....that means alot. + Report this comment
Posted by r.e.potter 2008-09-16 16:30:33 .... It sounds like your own writing is bringing you down. Maybe a happy smiley one will pick you up. For me I think that 3rd line should be 'dragged...but that is only my opinion. I thought it had meaning,,your poem that is. + Report this comment

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