Posted by Zombie Punk 2008-07-07 09:50:11 ....
     and she comes back with a grand slam! that was awesome poem, really. it flowed with a dark tone. the picture was eerie in a way. keep up the great works or art! + Report this comment |  |
Posted by June Eclipsis 2008-07-07 13:11:57 ...
     Damn! I would have never been able to write with rhyming words. Great job. + Report this comment |  |
Posted by brandon_scott 2008-07-07 14:47:44 ....
     I agree with June: the rhyming in the poem was phenomenal. I'm not too sure that I understand the meaning behind it, like maybe it's just out of my grasp. But, it flowed very well, and the rhetorical questions that were asked in the poem worked very well. Great job! + Report this comment |  |
Posted by sTiCkFiGuRe 2008-07-07 15:44:39 ....
     This was good as are all your poems,,a rare talent yer are. + Report this comment |  |
Posted by lemon 2008-07-07 20:50:39 ....
     This was good, I really enjoyed it. Your poetry always seems effortless. =] + Report this comment |  |
Posted by Amatayo 2008-07-08 00:16:26 ....
     Yeah this poem did rhyme really well. But I really don't understand what the poem was about. For what I got this was about death. But then it might not have been. + Report this comment |  |
Posted by Dirkin 2008-07-08 01:23:26 ....
     I felt a sense of the gothic reading this. The poem seems to be asking more philosophical questions about fate than actual people, to my mind. You rhyme like a fish swims, naturally + Report this comment |  |
Posted by garyowen 2008-07-10 01:25:00 ....
I'm going to show my ignorance here and guess that the 'grim reeper' has been cheated out of his due by 'suicide.' Even left guessing I can feel a music to your flow that is well pleasing to my mind. + Report this comment |  |
Posted by eternalsunshine 2008-08-01 10:51:18 ....
     This was good, it flows well, and the rhymes work wonderfully. I really liked this stanza:
" Or has he finally found her
To steal her tired breath?
For surely he is seething
To learn she's cheated death"
The picture really adds to the overall feeling of the poem as well. + Report this comment |  |