SHEEP IN A SLAUGHTER HOUSE 

Spray painted pictures on the walls,

Blood streaks through the halls,

Cocaine lines in the bathroom stalls,

Bumper stickers reading ‘kiss my ass',

Heroin needles hiding in the grass,

Homeless folk begging for change to spare,

I see an unlocked car, do I dare?

Sneak out at night, wearing black,

See the local freaks, shooting smack,

I set a house ablaze,

Stoned and dazed,

This life is one giant maze,

I can't seem to see past this blood soaked haze,

I break into a house,

Silent as a mouse,

Take the jewelry and the TV,

I'm high as **** on PCP,

Can't you see,

How this place is getting to me?

Everywhere you turn there's a gang,

Each holding a glock 9 that goes bang,

All have colors/black or blue or green or red,

All want each other dead,

That girl at school, well she's a *****,

These teachers just don't care anymore,

Life's a bore,

People love the violence, they want some more,

The parents just sigh and close the door,

At your age of prime,

You're dragged into a life of drugs and crime,

The only chance to get away is to write a story or make a rhyme,

And create a world that is everything sublime.

Keyword: world of shit filth can't stand it anymore hey you dropped your pocket

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Posted by philneale1952 2008-07-07 08:24:38 Reality Is this really how you see the world? There's a lot of powerful stuff in your writing, but no positives. I'm not a 'rose tinted' person, but there has to be a diametrically opposed lighter side that you could explore. Four pips. Phil + Report this comment
Posted by skyshark 2008-07-07 09:13:09 WoW!!!!! It was a powerful poem I just hope there is a lighter side to you than just pain and darkness, But I have to confess I been in dark places before myself good poem keep writeing + Report this comment
Posted by Something Indecent 2008-07-07 09:18:06 Excellent. I thought you did a really good job with this one Maxwell. Its dark and moody, pessimistic yet escapist. It flowed easily and left me with a pleasant taste in my mouth. Which has nothing to do with the donut I just ate. Two appendages up! + Report this comment
Posted by Zombie Punk 2008-07-07 09:42:15 .... Thanks! + Report this comment
Posted by Sad Sara 2008-07-07 09:46:42 DRAMA! Aye Max, that quite a Poetic performance. Very cool, I love it. Keep well, 'Anna + Report this comment
Posted by ams 2008-07-07 11:48:44 .... haha i thought that the keyword was pretty funny. the poem was really nice. actually thats a bad word to use to describe this, isnt it? It was written extremely well with a nice flow and definately potrayed the dark side of the world. its something that we have a tendancy to just kinda ignore and hush up. anyways great job. + Report this comment
Posted by brandon_scott 2008-07-07 14:36:28 .... Unfortunately, this poem hits the mark. I'm betting that you're pretty young, and that makes me sad, cause you shouldn't be that aware of all of the negative in the world just yet. But, you are, and you write about it, and it's genius. I'm glad you chose this site as an outlet. + Report this comment
Posted by r.e.potter 2008-07-07 16:46:00 .... Zombie the gangsta. Whats sad is that this world is in deep trouble. Even the kids that are great and want to achieve have a tall task ahead. First, they gotta dodge bullets from A-holes like the ones you wrote about. Second, they themselves will fall to temptation...not all of course. But this world is filled with scum. There's porn on Disney,,,God help us. My daughter is turning 16...God help me. + Report this comment
Posted by indianaman130 2008-07-07 17:14:21 .... Well zombie, my my, i hope you have seen to much and not done too much if you know what i mean. Powerful poem, makes me think im standing on the corner watching some S*** go down. + Report this comment
Posted by lemon 2008-07-07 20:43:02 .... Really great stuff. I think you may have a head for poetry after all hmm? You did good with your imagery there, I had no problem seeing what you were describing. I think the most thought provoking line in this poem is 'The parents just sigh and close the door' Really powerful stuff. =] + Report this comment
Posted by Zombie Punk 2008-07-12 17:49:12 .... Wow, thank you all for all the comments, they are much appreaciated. + Report this comment
Posted by C.R. Vard 2008-07-12 23:24:58 well done it seemed like the rhymes were a bit forced at times, otherwise it was well written. I liked in the 2nd to last stanza how 'life's a bore' was emphasized. I also thought the title was brilliant. + Report this comment
Posted by topsyturvywords 2008-07-31 18:42:28 .... you did great here max! I soooo love it...there's such coolness on how the words rhyme...i'll add it on my favorites...it's really hard to be a teenager...but it's fun...too bad mine's gonna end soon:( + Report this comment
Posted by Terry Collett 2008-08-07 02:31:50 .... The kind of poetry(yes real poetry)that makes you sit up and ponder at world around you, the good aspects& the bad. Written skillfully too. Good un Max. + Report this comment

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