Our sole goal: perfection,
everything else is naught but
a means to this one end.
But it's not something
that can be made alone,
it can only be given to
an audience of two, and two alone.

Perfection is not easy to say in words.
Tends to always lose something
in the translation from pure emotion
but it can be expressed in music.

Well the perfect chord
was already struck
long before the births
of you, I, everyone here.

It's been struck and struck again,
for thousands and millions of listeners.
humanity's heard it so often; again and again
but it's not the kind of thing you tire of.

As I sit in this dark dull room,
I'm still waiting to hear it myself.
The sadness glimmers in my eyes,
and runs down my face.

I see the blessed sitting together,
pulled together by its unspoken force.
It's still ringing in their ears,
and they're now two parts of one whole.

Someday, maybe by the grace of God,
those perfect notes played in unison
shall burst my waiting eardrums,
and knock me weeping to my knees.
And with tears and blood flowing
I'll testify to the joy and ecstasy
of freedom from being quietly alone.

Author's note: I intend to re-write (and re-publish) this. As I see it, this is a poor effort, that has promise, and I want to develop it so that it is worthy of it's subject. If you choose to comment, could you please do me a favour, and mention specific stanzas that were good and ones that need work done. To ensure there is no confusion about meaning - I wrote this as a paen to love (please say if you were able to work that out from the poem itself). Thank you in advance.

Keyword: That One Perfect Chord

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Posted by bubbly 2008-07-06 10:11:28 perfect imperfect hi! jj. ur poem is the statement on the current times. everyone seeks perfection. a 10 upon 10. so what about the imperfects. no one is concerned about them. this poem is extremely timely. keep it up. lol. ;-) + Report this comment
Posted by r.e.potter 2008-07-06 11:45:21 .... I think I understand what your going for. I understood the 2nd stanza the clearest. To me it was kinda choppy but still I good deep message in there...just kinda hard to find the (TRUE) meaning of this. + Report this comment
Posted by indianaman130 2008-07-06 12:26:15 .... to me it red (LOL) like sentences of metaphysic existentialism broken into pieces, then tried to fit them all together. Look at it like a puzzle with every word a piece, you'll know when they all fit, it shows in your other stuff. + Report this comment
Posted by Alcides 2008-07-06 13:23:40 Keeping playing/writing Perfection is relative, especially in music. That may not make much since by definition, but in structures like music and literature, judged best on emotion rather than pass/fail, it transcends Grammar or Theory. + Report this comment
Posted by June Eclipsis 2008-07-06 13:58:37 ... I loved this poem. It was deep, beautiful, and kept my mind entertained. Good job 5/5 + Report this comment
Posted by brandon_scott 2008-07-06 15:10:03 .... It took me a couple of readings, but when I finally made sense of it, it grabbed me. This is a really good poem, well written and with deep meaning. Excellent job. + Report this comment
Posted by Kasi elaborated 2008-07-06 16:47:12 .... I liked it, It's very good for a first draft. It reades simialr to a story.. Consider using synonyms for the repetive words, that always strikes me as a reader. + Report this comment

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