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Written by Amie Kerlin   
Thursday, 03 July 2008
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She liked to wear the prettiest ribbons in her hair. That's still the first thing little Tracy Tellington's mother, Abigail says when you ask about her daughter. She doesn't tell you that she died when she was twelve, or that she had been missing for 5 weeks before they found her. No, she tells about the ribbons that Tracy always tied in her pretty auburn hair...

 

     Sitting in the room alone with the interviewer Abigail sat and reflected back on her daughter's brief life. She recalled the day Tracy was born and how happy she was to be a mother. She thought about Tracy's first birthday and how pretty she looked with her auburn curls pulled up in two short pigtails atop her head and how she had smeared cake all over those pigtails by the end of the night. Abigail remembered her daughter's first day of kindergarten, how proud she had been that day. She told all of this to the interviewer, a Mr. Smith from the local newspaper. Mr. Smith asked Abigail many other mundane questions about Tracy like what kind of student she was, if she had many friends, if she was a high spirited girl. She answered them just as she answered the questions 4 years ago. Abigail knew Mr. Smith was trying to ease his way into asking questions about Tracy's demise, but he didn't realize that this was harder for her than just getting straight to the questions that hadn't already been asked all those years ago.

     Lighting a cigarette, Abigail finally was asked about the last day she had seen her little girl alive. She remembered that she was baking pies that morning for the Youth Soccer League bake sale that weekend. She remembered giving Tracy permission to walk with her cousin Alexander to go fishing in the small stream that was just beyond the tree line at the Southern edge of town. She recalls that Tracy was wearing an old pair of overalls with a bright pink shirt underneath and a white baseball cap on top of her curls and she told Mr. Smith that she remembered seeing the tips of a light pink ribbon sticking out of the baseball cap as Tracy walked out the door.

     Three hours later, Alexander called for Tracy because she had not made the ten minute walk to his house yet. From there Abigail says it's all a blur. She tells Mr. Smith that she doesn't recall walking the neighborhood calling Tracy's name, or calling the local police four hours after that. Abigail goes on to tell Mr. Smith that she has no recollection of identifying the white baseball cap that had been found in some bushes just around the corner from her home as Tracy's. Mr. Smith takes furious notes of Abigail's re-telling of the events of that horrible month. He notes that the search party along the Southern end of town involved almost everyone from town, since Tracy was so loved. He listens to her as she describes her ‘blackout' for the next few weeks and how she couldn't get out of bed because she ‘knew in her heart that her baby was dead.'

     Mr. Smith thanked Abigail and began to gather his things while concluding his article in his head:

Five weeks later, three girls on a scavenger hunt would walk upon a gruesome discovery. There shoved under a fallen tree along the Northern edge of town, was Tracy Tellington. The police report says that she had been beaten with a smooth curved surface multiple times in the head and chest until she was unrecognizable. Her jaw had been broken in several places; she'd lost most of her teeth in the beating. Her overalls were stained with blood and dirt and she had twigs, and leaves and a light pink ribbon tangled in her pretty auburn hair.

To this day Abigail Tellington refuses to admit to the brutal murder of her young daughter Tracy. She maintains that the last time she saw Tracy was when she walked out the backdoor to meet Alexander. Forensics says otherwise. From what the forensics team was able to piece together Abigail beat Tracy with the rolling pin she was using to bake the Youth Soccer League pies. She struck Tracy approximately 57 times on the head and approximately 34 times in the upper chest and neck area. The report states that Tracy had tried to block the strikes from the rolling pin with her forearms sustaining a broken wrist and a broken hand on her left arm and a shattered radius on the right. They concluded that she was still alive after the beating and eventually died from aspirating on her own blood. Traces of Tracy's blood and tissues were found in the trunk of Abigail's Honda civic as were soil samples on the tires that matched the ones taken from the North side of town.

     As the guards led Abigail back to her room in the Asylum for the Criminally Insane, Mr. Smith heard her ask the guard with a smile, "Did I ever tell you that my baby Tracy liked to wear the prettiest ribbons in her hair?"



Copyright 2008 Amie Kerlin
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Comments (19)
Posted by ams
2008-07-03 21:55:14
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this was extremely good. nicely written and i loved the story although it was sad. it was interesting how it was told through the convicted murderer's eyes and how she denied it and blocked it out of her memory.
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Posted by Zombie Punk
2008-07-03 22:00:27
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Well, that was different! I liked it. Good line flow and wording. I agree with amanda, it was interesting how the tale was laid out. I liked how she focused her mind on the ribbons and blocked out all the other painful memories.

Great Job!
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Posted by resistanceisfreedom
2008-07-03 22:16:05
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well done!! that story led me down a path and then completely turned when i learned the mother actually brutally murdered her own daughter. how can someone bake pies one minute and then take another person's life the next?? i guess the insane.
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Posted by flossy
2008-07-04 00:58:35
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Nicely written story.Just wondering why she did it though.Nice work amie
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Posted by philneale1952
2008-07-04 02:22:38
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Gets my vote. A beginning, a story in the middle and an ending. What more could you want?

Oh yes, style....it had that too. Read it through three or four times to be sure that I's missed nothing - don't do that too often.

9/10

Phil
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Posted by d.dasgupta
2008-07-04 05:50:51
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Tale of a criminally insane mother. Like flossy asks, one's curious. What exactly was her problem. I understand that she was deranged, but the precise moment or event that led her to the act. Some sort of a hint in that direction could add more life to the story. Of course, it hits you as it stands. May be hitting harder could hurt.
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Posted by bubbly
2008-07-04 22:28:13
interesting

hi! amie.

not everyday one reads an interesting story about an insane mom. she being criminally inclined is an added bonus. it adds to the thrill.

well done. lol. ;-)
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Posted by Something Indecent
2008-07-04 23:04:41
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Great story. I like the twist about killing her own daughter. The descriptions of her beating and eventual death were easy to imagine and well written. Another great dark piece from the mind of a lemon.
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Posted by A.T.O.M.
2008-07-04 23:17:51
wow

after her own daughter i was on the edge of my seat but it was really interesting i liked it i want to read more of your work in the future good really good story
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Posted by r.e.potter
2008-07-06 08:29:26
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Scary stuff, the criminally insane are. One minute baking pies and the next killing her daughter. Great story. I love stuff like this, insane,criminals,killings...for a story that is....well done.
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Posted by lemon
2008-07-06 16:16:32
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Thanks for the comments everybody! I will definitely fill in some of those blanks in the re-write. Great suggestions. =] keep em coming
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Posted by skyshark
2008-07-07 09:21:43
Good job

It's hard to believe you can write so dark I just hope these are just stories. I like it alot but sometimes you scare me. You write stuff nightmares are made of. All in all wright on!!!!!!!
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Posted by eternalsunshine
2008-07-07 15:11:59
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Story was good, I liked the details, and you sounded like you knew what you were talking about (aspirating, shattered radius).

However, I agree that her motivation should be explained more thoroughly. Why her daughter too?

Also, one thing confused me, at the beginning it says she was missing for 5 weeks before they find her and then later it says "She answered them just as she answered the questions 4 years ago." I just realized why, but maybe you could clarify how the daughter had already been found? I don't know, just thought that was a little confusing.
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Posted by indianaman130
2008-07-08 13:01:07
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Nice twisted dark tale you got here. I just wish i knew more, like what made mommy stop (hitting her baby, just kidding) and go out looking for her daughter with a rolling pin. i want to know what made her snap, but then i always want to know why.
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Posted by lemon
2008-07-08 13:13:50
What really happened.

The mom was jealous of the 'pretty auburn hair' and the ribbons. so when she saw the ribbon poking out from the hat, she snapped and beat her with the rolling pin, put her in the trunk of her car and drove her to the northern side of town instead of the southern side like she said. After all of this, she still continued to bake the pies and even sent them to the bakery sale. THE END lol
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