Death to Amatayo

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Written by Matthew Daniel Carter

Thursday, 03 July 2008

Lest this seem like only a tale of love, there shall be added a bit of wratH;

On this ground shall these words sing, and from each stanzA

Variety shall there be, for Jecklyl and Hide shall meet at lasT.

Each shall stand back to back in a duel, love ready to end the life of hatE.

Death reigned for Amatayo, for as the shots rang out both fell, killed by the others' hanD.

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Posted by slavetolove 2008-07-03 15:48:32 Excellent once again you have both sides which is awesome and the words just flow those words shall forever reign DEATH TO AMATAYO + Report this comment
Posted by fewix 2008-07-03 16:55:54 Not my taste... I know the focus is about death in this but it's a strong subject that needs to be countered with softer language, words like wrath and such put the image of blood and horror into my mind quite nicely, it might have been your goal for the reader but it took me back a bit into my seat. Keep writing though, this is interesting stuff. + Report this comment
Posted by Pilgrim 2008-07-03 17:00:16 .... I probably should make myself clear on this poem. This was written about another writer on this site whom I was speaking with the other day. If you've read any of his work he speaks a lot about death, of darkness, and with a tinge of a split personality. This was my effort, as a fellow writer, to do my duty and help him put to end his poetic psychological feud. + Report this comment
Posted by Amatayo 2008-07-03 17:13:02 .... YEAH WELL HE HAS BEEN TRYING TO GET RID OF ME BUT LIKE IT OR NOT HE WILL SOON BE THE ONE LEAVEING. Ha your funny you will be the one leaving. REALLY AND HOW DO YOU EXPECT TO DO THAT. Do not worry it will all go down tomorrow. + Report this comment
Posted by ams 2008-07-03 20:25:39 .... haha i thought that this was cool. i liked how you had the loved and hated on each side and the poem still flowed smoothly + Report this comment
Posted by flossy 2008-07-04 01:00:59 .... I enjoyed it.Thought it was clever and funny.So did you write this just to piss someone off.Whats the point.Why cant you children just get on. + Report this comment
Posted by philneale1952 2008-07-04 06:26:53 What????????????? With you there, flossy. Somebody needs their legs slapping. Get a grip and either write in an intelligent manner or don't bother at all. Zero Phil + Report this comment
Posted by Pilgrim 2008-07-04 08:14:43 .... Okay, I'm assuming it is time to get even simpler with my explanation due to the fact that some are still not understanding. Amatayo and I had a short discourse about one of his poems called Death, if you would like to read the comments all you have to do is go to the poem spelled D-E-A-T-H. When you read that, maybe you'll get a better understanding, but if not, let't resume our lesson. In the discussion I challenged him to write a message on both sides of a poem; I thought this would be a good idea for Amatayo for in many of his poems he's battling with another personality. This poem, in short, was my contribution to a final battle that could set this poor guy free. So either read in an intelligent manner, or don't read at all. + Report this comment
Posted by flossy 2008-07-04 12:09:54 .... Gentlemen re-read my comment and get a grip of yourselves.I said it was good, I enjoyed. Then I asked a question. Phil, I did'nt say it was rubbish so go and have a lie down and take your tablets.Goodman yourself. + Report this comment
Posted by A.T.O.M. 2008-07-04 14:31:50 Really good i think i want to try something like this seems difficult but great job on the poem loved;hated from reading amatayo comments i see that hes saying he has a split personality and this is a poem on how to end it ok i get it + Report this comment
Posted by brandon_scott 2008-07-10 15:02:12 .... Ok, so, I liked the way the words were on both sides, and I thought that the way it was written was very good, but I'm just not understanding Amatayo's split personality thing. Maybe I'm ignernt. So be it. + Report this comment
Posted by harmattan 2008-09-03 04:12:14 DTA NOw, I suggest that you four sit on the couch there, and don't get up till you have sorted this out. I tell you now, only two of you are going to leave this room alive. Go on then, talk each other to death! The big problem with obscure is that it ALWAYS needs explaining. A mention of split personality in the title might have helped. Or as my Irish Gran would have said, "You three are a right pair if ever there was one!" Harmattan. + Report this comment

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