Posted by Amatayo
2008-07-02 19:30:34
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Everyone I know this is the third death you will read but the person who I was competing against said that everyone was just saying they liked how I wrote the poem not that it was good so I re-wrote it the same way he did so please tell me and him which one is better.
And yes even though it took me exactly 1 min and 16 sec I bet it is still better then his.
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Posted by r.e.potter
2008-07-02 19:50:55
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If I had to pick one it would be this, but ever so slightly. This was bad too. But when you write it within a minute,,,wadda ya expect. This one seem to read easier.
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Posted by lemon
2008-07-02 20:00:22
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this one was kind of creepy, the way it ended with 'Death is what they call me dear' I liked this one better than the other one. --not the other one YOU wrote, but the other 'Death Is' poem
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Posted by lemon
2008-07-02 20:01:17
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by the way, since you rated your own poem, I didn't since I was going to rate it the same as you =]
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Posted by slavetolove
2008-07-02 20:18:49
i see
well amatayo after you being the one to ask me to have a competition you complain alot about what to write about and you hide behind your rhyming which is easy try something different like a plain poem about something (which means no rhyming) ill be waiting (next competition name we don't know why
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Posted by resistanceisfreedom
2008-07-02 22:28:01
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wait a second, okay i'm getting fucking sick of reading your stuff when you have more than one profile. how can you be in a competition when slavetolove is you as well???? so screw this. i'm done reading your shit.
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Posted by philneale1952
2008-07-03 02:50:00
Identities
OK, got a great idea..........why don't we all put our REAL photos on the profile, then this entire issue of dupilcate goes away IF everyone is honest (says he who used to hide behind his cat!).
The cat's better looking than me, as you can see from the snap attached to this message.
Thought the poem was thought provoking, but not sure what thoughts it will provoke in me yet.
Phil
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Posted by allmine
2008-07-03 08:32:06
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I don't want to know about who's what and so on and so forth. I think this was a decent poem and I loved the ending line. But I think it was a bit ridiculous to have three death stories all in a row. Just my personal point of view
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Posted by A.T.O.M.
2008-07-05 12:58:53
Wow
every freaking poem i read from amatayo has that retarded slavetolove argueing with him about crap but anyway i liked the poem and the way it was said but having so many deaths going down the side is repetitive and sloppy
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Posted by brandon_scott
2008-07-07 16:42:21
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The poem was kinda bad, I'm sorry to say. It didn't rhyme right. It's one saving grace was the very last line, which, indeed, was a great line. That one should have been saved for a better poem.
By the way, I still can't figure out why anyone would want to have more than one profile. If you write, write well, and take credit for it. If you write crappy, quit writing. Don't be an ass and try to boost your rating and your credits by commenting on your own stuff.
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