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The Spark


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Written by Alex Hodson   
Wednesday, 02 July 2008

Strike the match, here comes the spark,
That lights up your eyes
And smothers the dark
With its fiery lies.

It breathes heat
And its tiny flame dances
Before your eyes you greet
The light with fighting glances.

And yet you wonder
How so beautiful a thing
Can shake your thoughts, get under
Your senses and ultimately bring

Sheer misery and death,
The wrinkling of your skin, the hanging
Of your eyes, the fog of breath
And the fatigue of a mind that's banging

To have one more, to light it up and get
The exhilaration of one more, just one
Cigarette.
After that no more, I promise, then I'm done


Copyright 2008 Alex Hodson
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Comments (10)
Posted by garyowen
2008-07-02 03:44:41
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That brought back such fond memories.

very well written
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Posted by philneale1952
2008-07-02 04:46:25
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Almost a sense of panic and speeding up towards the end and the final (!) drag.

Been there, got the tee-shirt, felt the pain.

Good poem.

Phil
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Posted by resistanceisfreedom
2008-07-02 07:09:09
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i actually didn't know you were talking about cigarettes until the end but when i figured it out i thought you did a pretty good job. the last line was my favorite.
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Posted by allmine
2008-07-02 07:40:32
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Great poem. I wondered at first if you were talking about passion. Then I thought you might be talking about like pyromania. Loved the last sentence. Now if only I could get my boyfriend to quit!
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Posted by Kasi elaborated
2008-07-02 09:59:23
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Yeah, I got the whole "pyromania" feel too at first. This poem has great structure! I have never been a smoker, but you converyed to me the hapless sensation of addiction. Job well done.
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Posted by lemon
2008-07-02 12:39:42
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I thought this was about pyromania at first too. the way you describe the spark.. yeah. but then I TOTALLY understood what you were getting at when you started talking about smoking... the flame on the end of the match or lighter meant that serenity was coming soon lol.
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Posted by Amatayo
2008-07-02 21:37:10
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This poem was okay. But at the same time I felt that through the poem the rhyme kind of fell on and off.

so yeah
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Posted by June Eclipsis
2008-07-15 14:42:50
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I liked it a lot. It does give a sense of panic up towards the end, as philneale 1952 stated. I think you did a wonderful job on your poem. It was great.
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Posted by zenith
2008-07-30 16:29:50
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A spark can be a cause for comment. Makes me think. Must be pretty "drag"ging. The first puff and then the chain smoking. All this seems too familiar. Liked it.
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Posted by chaabuk
2008-08-09 01:13:37
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Even a spark can become the muse for the poem! Whereas at one plane it provides light, on another it can burn the life out. This is a unique mix of heat and light. Thoughtful.
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